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This little cloud of mine...





This little cloud of mine
So wispy and white
so pure and un knowing of our plight

we dance to the ground
with nothing of knowing

this little cloud of mine, floats through the leaves

this little cloud of mine...

to which i must

destroy.

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Written August 30th, 2005

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  • Secretiveillusion
    August 30, 2005
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    Zephyrus, Tis ok. Yes you were reading into it a bit much, it has nothing to do with finances lol. More to do with an unfortunite situation. Thank you for commenting!

  • Secretiveillusion
    August 30, 2005
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    Thank you!


  • Zephyrus
    August 30, 2005
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    What a cool Word

    This is a pretty cool little poem, and what makes it evern cooler is the use of the word PLIGHT... though i dont quite know what this has to do with finances unless your refering to the cloud of your to either be a sign of bad luck with money or your general income... Im prolly reading to much into this poem, but none the less it is very cool. Keep writing.

  • t7a7s7
    August 30, 2005
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    Short but gets the point across. Good job keep up the good work.