In a poet's world the stars are dancers
ballerinas robed in twinkling light
ushered to the stage on wings of Angels
when the day at last succumbs to night
Sunset is a fleeting sea of colors
brushed upon the canvas of the skies
patiently awaiting mother darkness
then slipping from the sight of mortal eyes
Trees of winter stand as ancient soldiers
guardians whose vigil will not cease
catching pleasant dreams in barren branches
to share with us so we may sleep in peace
Raindrops are the tears of spirit lovers
as they cry in happiness and bliss
mingling with the sun to build a rainbow
then falling to the Earth with quenching kiss...
Some can't find the beauty that surrounds them
others may not care for rhyme or prose
but when they see a stem left bare and broken
the poet closes eyes and smells the rose.
Author notes
drakothstheron
A contest entry
- Simple Beauty by NSYancey.
300 points, ended May 17, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Real Poetry by The Godfather.
468 points, ended November 20, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
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425 points, ended April 5, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Heart Of A Poet by HisFavoriteMistake.
650 points, ended July 14, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Paint your picture in my mind_contest part one of four by drakostheron.
950 points, ended October 1, 2008, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - CELEBRATING POETRY AND POETS- ONE-DAY competition, "PREVIOUSLY WRITTEN" WORK ONLY by Vera Rich.
6000 points, ended November 26, 2008, 127 entries
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550 points, ended July 3, 107 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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"Trees of winter stand as ancient soldiers
guardians whose vigil will not cease
catching pleasant dreams in barren branches
to share with us so we may sleep in peace "
These are my favourite lines!
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
-heva ♫
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Thank you for submitting this to my "Celebrating Poetry and Poets competition". I am placing it on my list for further consideration.
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"when the day at last succumbs to night" - what a beautiful line that is. And your last two lines are very beautiful as well, the image of the stem missing the rose and the poet visualizing the missing flower.
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This deserves the champagne trimmings ...a perfect sip with all the ticklish bubbles. I love the last lines...
"but when they see a stem left bare and broken
the poet closes eyes and smells the rose." ...just delicious writing. Certainly lifted my spirits, (no pun intended). Best wishes in the contest. Rhonda
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Hi there!
A wonderful piece that shows the stair-step of many thoughts. Congrats on the trophy as a worthy winner.
Almost a sonnet, the 10-11 syllabic count are measured just right!
*Post Script*
Did you realize and want the quadrupal spacing between stanzas? I would close them in were it mine.
So lovely.:
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Excellent you have the heart of this poet.
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thank you very much for entering. this entry was amzingly written, and gave me goosebumps all over. you dont focus on what a a poets heart is made fo or what makes one, you introduce the topic, then describe the true essence of a poets world. i loved this, and i appreciate the thought and time put behind this. good job, dear poet.
In Southern Ink,
Chelsea
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You are a very talented writer and this is a beautiful poem. Thanks for your entry
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Didnt you win silver in my last contest? Well, it was a good poem! Since you won second last time, I donèt think that you should go in this one. Thanks for the entry cause I love this beautiful poem!
Emma -
Beautifully written! It has a nice message to it. Some people just can't see the pretty side of nature and everything it has to offer. I like it. Good job.
Emma ^_^
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I think you have done a pretty good job with this poem here
the rhyme is consistant and the flow is very close to flawless actually
what I also love about this poem is that you managed to capture all those images within your lines...
Very well done!
Thank you for this entry, I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
Astonishing!
What an amzing poem!I absolutely love the imagery within this piece of art. Very creative, original, and beautiful! What a masterpiece!
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You paint a world of soft accents and highlights, to an artist eye, the words written are crafted with love and tenderness.Delightful poem, good luck in the contest
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Lovely tribute to all things beautiful, as seen through the eyes of a true poet. An enchanting read, full of excellent images to inspire the mind. I wish you well in the contest.
Ann
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I guess we do see things a little differently, but then again so does any other form of artist. I really enjoyed reading this piece. It is an excellent interpretation of the way we view everyday things.
--Animepoetess
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This is truly beautiful. One of my very favorite subjects to both write and read about. Being a poet is something special isn't it? I think there's a special place in heaven for God's poets. He opened our eyes and hearts so that we could see and feel pain on a greater level, then write about it for the world to see/read. There's a certain magic in that.
Have a great day Larry. 
~Lyrical
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a poet, though not handsome
and some may say this quite absurd.
a poet, though not winsome
may seduce a heart with just a word.
the devil made me do it 
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You have made some of the most wonderful word choices possible for this piece! I just love the richness and the vubrancy of the imagery created here. This is fantastic. What a pleasant read! You bring your words to life here.
(`'•.¸(`'•.¸ ¤ ¸.•'´)¸.•'´)
~~~Touchof1der~~~
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I'm always weary of reading work that defines poet's in their title yet this piece was a lovely read due to the flow of it's words and the precision of it's intentions. Tony.
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Aw, what a charming little masterpiece! An ode to poets everywhere! This is very true, dear friend, the poetic mind sees things no one else can see. My favorite part is:
Some can't find the beauty that surrounds them
others may not care for rhyme or prose
but when they see a stem left bare and broken
the poet closes eyes and smells the rose.
Lovely work! Keep it up! -
This is verry nice.... i really full of imagery, i could see everything you were talking about. It sort of made me feel like i was there.
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I absolutely loved this poem.You had great word choice and the poem flowed very well. I could see a lot of this in my head. I loved it."In a poet's world the stars are dancers
ballerinas robed in twinkling light
ushered to the stage on wings of Angels
when the day at last succumbs to night "
There was something in the first stanza that really captured me. I think it was the first two lines. This poem made me happy and it made me smile(which i don't really do all that often). Awesome poem. I'm sure I've said this a few times, but I loved it. Keep up the fantastic work and I am looking forward to seeing my work from you.
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