There comes a time,
a moment,
a person,
a relationship
when words will fail
even the best of us.
This is the threshold
where words should end
and the heart and soul begin.
It would look like this...
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Do not force words into it,
it is already full.
Some would call it a long silence.
I would call it your silent poem together.
Leave it be.
It is a complete conversation in itself,
even more complex than words,
and you should let it finish.
Words will gradually fall in again,
first like a light, scattered rain,
and then a drenching downpour.
Like my silent poems
may yours be many
happy
shared
and last for days at a time...
Author notes
A poem born out of an AP relationship that has gone through many trials and has settled into a silent poem, and a special thanks to blueeyestexas for several collaborational comments, as well as others now, including my Master!
Written August 30th, 2005
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Nice poem. It's true that words aren't everything and sometimes they're not needed at all. A very enjoyable read.
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this describes what i truly yearn for in my life right now ~ some truly healing silence, and over the years i have learned its best sometimes to say nothing at all.
excellent poem
elaine
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This was wonerful, full of suprise really, i didnt know what to expect, i loved the ending, and to be honest, when i scrolled down the " silent poem " i felt many things with no words there, so yea,,,,, wonderfuly done
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and you've added an additional dimension to the piece, so an applause for you!
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Well, Porcelain, it is obvious it didn't work out because one or the other of you did not understand the silence! Silence takes two, gabbing, one! My silence here, a turbulent relationship where the words finally failed, and we both realized it, and now in a silent phase, the relationship keeps going... imagine that!
Now someone not talking to you? Impossible! and many, too? Noooooooo!
Here, have a moment of positive silence, Amy:... ... through all the fears, if one of us is still positive at the end, then the relationship does not fall apart!
OK, enough abstract thinking for one evening! You did perceive that silence is complex, afterall!
wayne
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This is a very interesting poem. Many of my relationships have fallen into this stage... unfortunately, it didn't work out.. *sighs* You've expressed somethign very.. complex here, and you've done it wonderfully. I enjoyed reading this, and didn't find any errors. Thanks for sharing *smiles*
~Amy
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WOW... This is an awesome poem Gramps!!! I definately like the point of view in it!!! You did a great job!!!
Hugs,
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Thank you, aby, for the thought on a background, I mulled it over and still think the plain black is emptiest, and deepest... but I may experiment!
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Thanks, granny, but don't imagine your words in the box, but your heart!
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Thanks, Belle, that I found someone special was never the question, it was getting through all the hellfire and brimstone to a peaceful quiet that this piece celebrates!
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Thanks for encapsulating that early edit, albus, I actually went back to using it after a dozen or so experiments...!
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Well, rem, yes, words do limit our perceptions, both by relying on them too much, or by not having enough of them to grasp a situation! A double-edged sword... nice philosophical thought...
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Well, thank you, your-time, now I will be walking around with Simon and Garfunkel in my head all day long! At least they fill the silence well! Take care...
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Well, Ohbi Bohb, my Master, once again (number 4151 to be exact!) you have added a dimension to the work you have commented on, and I shamelessly pilfer it once again! (for the 2859 time to be exact!)
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Well, Ms. Yndina, you insight serves you well, for this is a dedication to an AP relationship of mine that went through hell and back and has peacefully settled into a healing silence... if you can imagine that!
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Words can say so much, but because they are structured, they can also be confining and just fall short. A perfect example: in German, they have no word for deja vu. Germans who experience deja vu are often confused and think they are the only ones to ever feel that way because if it hasn't been named it obviously doesn't happen very often. Their language doesn't let them express their deja vu to the point of thinking it doesn't exist. But anyways, your poem...nicely done. I really like the long spaces you added for the lengths of silence...very appropriate. I would almost take the frame off of your first "silence"...it almost detracts from it...but that is only my personal opinion Your last stanza has such a change of view and content compared to the rest...it's almost like a dedication instead of a continuation of the poem. I'm not sure if that detracts or not...just something that I noticed Great write, anyways...I enjoyed it
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Ah....exactly. Silence is not always a void...but a complete conversation in itself.
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excellent
"Hello darkness, my old friend,
I’ve come to talk with you again,
Because a vision softly creeping,
Left it’s seeds while I was sleeping,
And the vision that was planted in my brain
Still remains
within the sound of silence" - your poem reminds me of this part of the song...
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This is a wonderful piece. Sometimes, I envy other poet talents. With that being said, the more I read great work, the more I desire to write more. Keen your chin up, you have a bless day and God bless you too
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very well written poem....... i keep finding more and more poems of yours on AP, and they never fail to impress me, this poems seems rather dark but beautiful all the same
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i have always wondered how limited and twisted words can get.we live in an illusionary world created and ruled by words,even the best feelings can be forcefully expressed in words alone....words can be shallow or meaningful...but sometimes silence conveys so much more..great idea
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Beautiful, Unique
wow... it's a bit of a contrast really from writing all the words... but words aren't needed in some moments in life. beautiful poem
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kool!
this is kool!
i like how you wrote it
and i m a big fan of backrounds and u dont have oone
it would look a little better with a bakround but its
still awesome!
good write
good job
kep it up!
much luv,
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Very unique and an alternate kind of poem. We can imagine our own words in the box. Creative.
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isn't it when you can be happy together without words that you know you have found true contentment. An interesting idea, and the unusual structure underscores your meaning well...good write.
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Aw, shucks....thanks!
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yes, blueeyes, I got rid of that ugly colon, and added the 'it is full' line after it, an insight I had not originally seen! Thanks again!
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wow, even the background makes the poem seem silent. The whole poem is incredible and the way that everything is put together is brilliant.
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You know what? I bet if you took out the line "it looks like this:" it would give that frame even more depth...I dunno...it is stunning.
Peace, Kelly -
thank, blueeyes, I think I have made the frame work better now, as it was bothering me, too! An applause for a spurring comment!
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Silence is golden and I love it. Like in Pulp Fiction when Uma Thurman and John Travolta are at Jack Rabbit Slim's eating and Uma says to him...."You know you've found somebody special when the two of you can just shut the fuck up."
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What a relief it is to finally be in any relationship where you DON'T have to say anything sometimes!! It offers in a new space of discomfort/comfort...
Amazing observation! I wasn't sure about the frame...but, I like it now!
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This is wonderful - such an amazing thought, I would even say that its inspiring and definitely thought provoking. The graphic that you added was a touch of genius. This one will remain in my heart and in my soul - you have touched me deep down inside and given voice to something which I think people are often afraid of. Excellent piece
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Hmmmmmmmm.........not really a poem, but really different. I liked it for it's wordings and for the idea. It was really unique. There comes a time, a moment,
a person,
a relationship
where words fail even the best of us.
This is the threshold
where words end
and the heart and soul begin.
Great stuff here!Well done!
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Brilliant
Wow I really liked this. It was a brilliant concept. It is very true as well. If you want you can come and check out some of my writes. I would greatly appreciate it if you did. Thank you. Keep on writting and again very good write. -
Hahahaha! I'm laughing out loud here! I don't know which poem I liked best, the one outside, or the one inside the box. Brilliant concept, wbiro, brilliant!
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This I can most certainly achieve by the help of my narcoleptic muse
On a more serious note, very touching and wise words indeed
Thanks for the reminder as we all need one and some of us more often than others
This is truly something of depth and I must say has became one of my most favs *sighs*
Poignant as it gets
-me
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hhehehe... creative and different... sometimes silence is golden... nice thinkin!! keep up the awesome work it was really good!!!
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I really like this poem. Sometimes silence is best.
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I am absolutely amazed that this poem moved anyone, Shadow! and I confess, it was born out of a true relationship here on AP, so maybe it is not so amazing after all!
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I had tingles racing my spine. Tears of joy are in my eyes. This is a brilliant poem, and the content is beautiful. My soul is reaching out to this poem, and embracing it. It has been a long time since I read a poem this good.
Fatally yours,
Shadow xxx
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