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Coeur Cassé





 

 


 

Pretend you're not affected
that it doesn't mean a thing
when a heart offered freely
cracks in the cold again

The Great Pretender - Platters

I'll pretend I'm not affected
that it doesn't mean a thing
for the heart I offered freely
to be frozen out again


A Thousand Miles From Nowhere -Dwight Yoakam



(April 2005)

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"BROKEN HEARTS ARE AS PAINFUL AS BROKEN BONES: STUDY ANI"
morphogenesis.info/newslog2.php/_d144/_v144/__show_article/_a000144-000121.htm

'“BROKEN HEART” SYNDROME: REAL,..'
www.hopkinsmedicine.org/Press_releases/2005/02_10_05.html

Written August 29th, 2005

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  • Kari gold member
    April 17, 2008

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    I can so relate to this piece here Pretending really does leave one feeling cold and makes one build up walls towards that person even more. They don't realize the evil game they are playing.
    I can't stand pretenders. Be real or don't befriend me. I have gotten screwed over more then once so hopefully never again. This also made me think of my family and the pretending that goes on there and the walls that have built up. It's sad really.
    This was a very personal heartfelt poem that many can relate to


  • suseann
    January 26, 2008
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    Perfecto!


  • Sandal
    November 23, 2007

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    Gah! Pretend it doesn't mean a thing, and love dies a painful and prolonged death.
    Your mirrors reflect each other with flaws, each one showing a victim. Humanity is either a burden or the most wonderful thing in the world, there are no midpoints.
    Excellent, as is your wont.


  • artisticxpoetry
    September 18, 2006
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    awwww this was simple and beautiful, i loved it truely, and deeply so. thank you for entering, lotz of lovez and lotz of luck
    -theartzgrl~*~


  • Lyndon gold member
    June 8, 2006
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    Aesthetically pleasing - these two mirror-like stanzas. They can be read again and again; a fair enough test to their literary quality. You can warm up my heart with such verses anytime. Ron


  • Maatkara gold member
    March 19, 2006
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    I'll take the "literate" as a worthy compliment then


  • Edna Sweetlove
    March 19, 2006
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    As you might imagine, a bit too whimsical and gentle for my warped and vicious tastes. However, I can say nothing against it, not that I would, sweetie that I now am. Literate too, which is nice.

  • Jason Alexander
    March 12, 2006
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    wonderfull poem i loved this it flowed so well and had such a meaning too the words it was just amazing great work you truly are a gifted poet


  • Maatkara gold member
    February 22, 2006
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    Thank you It's not written in a specific form, but just a hint of a mirror theme.


  • kryspin
    February 22, 2006
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    actually, the french title attracted me LOL.


  • kryspin
    February 22, 2006
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    pretending is just a mask. I enjoyed this, i recognize the pattern and structure but just can't put my finger on what type of poem this may be.


  • Maatkara gold member
    January 2, 2006
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    Haha! Not really ('history' anyway - see the date), that takes two to do.. and would've been easier to deal with and resolve


  • Wildequill
    January 2, 2006
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    Well now... this is a bit of a change, ain't it..? bit of
    (s)word fighting...? Cheez - there is so much of this going round right now! Must be the season..


  • Maatkara gold member
    December 31, 2005
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    Thank you, PS! It need not be a succession, but just one particular recidivist

  • PreciousSilence
    December 31, 2005
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    Very simple.. but it gave me chills. I can just imagine the person sitting there writing this.. while imagining all the lovers who have left them. wonderful


  • December 31, 2005
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    This is good.

  • shattered innocence
    December 28, 2005
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    wow a heart with in a cold prison. Two short stanzas to show much pain. You vividly capture everything with in this short beautiful poem I usually need 20 lines or more. Great write and I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering my contest

  • Maatkara gold member
    October 19, 2005
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    Hah! If this isn't classic irony.. I don't know what is

  • peter danielsen
    October 18, 2005
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    I cannot stand pretending
    what mean and crazy
    thought
    my heart is offered
    daily
    my soul will not be
    bought

    So utterly
    affected
    I'm frozen, torn
    but free
    as thoughts go on pretending
    I shall not
    dance with thee
    Edited on Oct 18, 4:26 because ''.


  • Maatkara gold member
    September 24, 2005
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    Haha! Thanks, hon Good comment It's more representing a mirror effect though.. that those who hurt, hurt themselves too.


  • Trial and Error
    September 24, 2005
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    Ooooo Miss Maat! This is beautiful! I love how you wrote it. With the first verse kind of spiteful, telling him.. And the next more somber... Atleast that's kind of what I got out of it... Sorta... Not exactly.. But I don't know how to describe what I'm trying to say... So I'ma say great write, and shut up
    I ♥ You
    Kat


  • suseann
    September 16, 2005
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    Although these links for the most part are stating one won't die from a broken heart.I've seen surviving partners parish shortly after a lose of one another.Way too many times.So even though I don't know what's wrong.You stop that my sweet answer lady!If it's hurting you,it's hurting me and a lot more.Your very loved!Be well,and I'm here if ever things need talking over.LOL~~Suseann


  • HeavenScent4U
    September 8, 2005
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    Maatkara, this is short but very effective. I know I can relate to it. I am very behind on my reading so I will have to read your links later but thank you for posting them.

    Your background just made this piece that much more effective. Great job, it is always a pleasure reading your writing. You are a true talent. Hope all is well in your corner of the world.
    Be Well and Be Blessed
    ~Namaste~
    Michelle


  • Maatkara gold member
    September 4, 2005
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    Thank you, Duana! Yes, the worst part is some you dare question about their behaviour that was hurtful, act offended and defensively accuse you of misperceiving them. That of course only compounds the hurt by invalidating your feelings (whereas the truly guiltless sincerely apologize immediately).
    Adding insult to injury is a common ploy of those in denial when confronted by the results of their own actions.
    Edited on Sep 05, 5:04 because ''.


  • duana
    September 2, 2005
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    By the way I look forward to reading this links. You are so right that emotional pain is not only as painful, but it feels physical- and yet it (atleast with the group of people I grew up with and am a part now)- emotional pain is completely ignored. It's not easy, that's for sure.


  • duana
    September 2, 2005
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    Hi Maat!! I think you know that I can relate to you on this one. You have done a beautiful job. I could rant on in twenty poems on this subject just to try to understand it, and you get it as clear and pure as flowing water in one succinct poem. This is gorgeous, and yes painful. And the background is simply perfect!

  • Lord Gegishov
    August 31, 2005
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    A most praiseworthy piece, dear Maatkara!!


  • Yemassee gold member
    August 30, 2005
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    I read the beginning of it, I could find nothing to pick on...where is the fun in that?


  • Maatkara gold member
    August 30, 2005
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    Thanks Yem We are biologically wired to bond socially for survival. It is therefore physically devastating to be deprived of it.
    I think you should click the second link, “BROKEN HEART” SYNDROME: REAL, POTENTIALLY DEADLY BUT RECOVERY QUICK" much more impressive physical evidence in that one.

    ~G

  • Busho
    August 30, 2005
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    glad to see u have found your muse again pity it took a painful experience to do it...
    nice one

    col


  • Yemassee gold member
    August 30, 2005
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    Man that first link...my brother recently died of Pulmonary Fibrosis, a disease for which there isn't a cure...very little has been done to try and find a cure and that site is spending money studying "broken hearts!" Studies like that always make me laugh. We already knew that rejection hurts, and a statement like this one,

    and the mechanism appears to be similar to the experience of physical pain," Lieberman said.

    does little to convince me of this studies value. My guess is someone got rejected and was determined to prove that their pain was as bad as those who suffer real illnesses.

    Ok, that part of me has had its say.

    No on a practical stand point. I have no complaint with your words, I've been there and would be a fool to say that having my heart tossed back in my face with all it's accompanying grief didn't hurt. It hurt like hell, emotionally, and the prolonged stress certainly wore on me physically...and I spent no tax dollars to know that.

    From a personal standpoint, I'm sorry if this is based on experience, especially a new one. I wish those who once supposedly loved us, took the time to love themselves a little less and be kind when breaking up, and remember that we, the poor saps, would like to think that not only we were once loved, but also that that person we loved hasn't really turned out to be yet another self-centered hedonist.

    Yes I'm projecting, lol.

    I bow yto your words and your notion of emotional pain...thank goodness mine is long past!

  • Maatkara gold member
    August 30, 2005
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    Oh, I agree! Has to start with educating the educators, indeed.


  • MargaretG
    August 30, 2005
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    I come from a family of stoics, even the children swallowed tears rather than show them. That just multiplied the hurts, as there were never consequences for hurtful behaviour. It falls into abusive cycles, and the abuser thinks it's normal until the victim calls "enough". Then it's too late.
    I think education is the way to go. Teach the teachers how emotions work, and the children will get it by osmosis.


  • Maatkara gold member
    August 30, 2005
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    Thank you, Margaret! I think the 'pretending' is more to hide the effect of what one has been conditioned to believe is not 'real' and a sign of some weakness to admit. Many are also simply ignorant of the effect their cold, exclusionary behaviour has on others, compounded by the stoic facade the affected often adopt... Hence the cycle.

    If more are made aware that such effects are biologically real, and not some presumed 'over emotional' weakness of character, perhaps the problem will be reduced in social interactions. Idealistic?

    ~G


  • MargaretG
    August 30, 2005
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    I read about the physical sensation of emotional pain when it was first published in October 2003, a study of social exclusion. It explained my misery at the time.
    Is everyone pretending? If people are affected by the suffering of others, why do they return pain for pain? I soothe my heart by believing that hurts are not deliberate, or if they are, result from a pain worse than my own.
    Your poem is excellent and very thought provoking, hence my questions. I love the mirror form.


  • suseann
    August 30, 2005
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    Ah! yes. But remember,what goes around comes around.Turnabouts fair play.There's more.But it's late and I'm brain dead.I loved it!~~Suseann


  • Maatkara gold member
    August 30, 2005
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    Thank you! Yes, I think you're right, that is worth considering. Only thing is I'd have to come up with the extra verses. This was meant to be more a dual/mirror perspective, hence the two stanzas with the subtle shift.

    ~G


  • August 30, 2005
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    HI! Small poem but so good. It has a beat that you could exploit here. Maybe by making it longer, it would be wonderful lyrics don't you think? I do!

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