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i should have felt the foreboding of the circumstances.

and maybe i should have foresaw the pending fatality

and tainting of something good that shouldn't have had to end

in that certain way.

in this certain hellish tragedy.

in a bleeding from the mouth, eyes and fingertips

and everything else that experienced

You.

but take comfort in knowing that nothing will be forgotten

because you're still under my tongue,

and behind my eyelids,

and now there are things that i can only attribute to you.

and for the sake of memory and empathy

i want to remember what i felt when i penned these feeble words,

and prior to and after this rupture of euphoria,

at the quiet but kicking euthanization,

the realization of bleak and somber truth and the reality that we thought could be hidden from.

that we thought wouldn't find us.

but though we ignored the reason tapping on the windows,

i can still see light visible from behind the shut door,

peeking through the cracks in the wall,

an acknowledgment of hope -

in that what we believe has died

cannot decay, will always smell sweet, and may just be sleeping.

and there are things that are certain. such as

that your breath is everywhere.

that there is an aching for your voice.

and that i will still feel you on my skin

for awhile to come.

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Written August 29th, 2005

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  • RyanLong
    May 19, 2006
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    The is an excellent poem. You really dug deep and put alot of emotion in it, or so it seems. The imagery is extremely potent as well as flawless. Congratulations on a superb work.

  • Danoz
    May 19, 2006
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    Very powerful write. Im not usually into this type but i quiet enjoyed it. Such a sad think losing someone. Especially when you know they're not really gone...

    Cheers

  • Ode to no one
    February 5, 2006
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    Made me cry.
    Keep writing, your work is beautiful.

  • Painpoet
    September 10, 2005
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    Very nicely done well written and sincere good work i enjoyed this one


  • Odio
    September 10, 2005
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    oh my god... i too have been worried about my boyfriend and i breaking up soon.. it's been 9 months and i think i would actually BREAK if that did happen... but i know how you feel. this is a wonderful poem and i can totally relate.

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