the dim deserted hall
mix regality with deception,
letting "real men" watch us
from their painted perches
they say I am watched,
slowly digging my way
to an inferno
for the worst of humantiy
the pews look like crags,
so the fine, red carpets and shades
must be scorching lava
in this church
oh, but that's not how it is everywhere
no God yet...
they said they'd pray for me
twenty years gone by...
unless this is hell,
God sure is slow
Author notes
All suggestions or comments welcome.
This weekend two more people said they'd pray for me. Been almost twenty years now...no god-like actions yet. I wonder why?
Written August 29th, 2005
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I found this relatable. I come from an ultra religious background but started thinking for myself one day.
nicely expressed,
Lea -
11/10 :D
hmmmm....I'm betting that this IS hell...seems to be a rational explanation, if one believes in 'God', but I don't, so I can only surmise that the well-intentioned souls who said they would pray for you have wasted their time. But then again...it never hurts to have people pulling for you.
Great job on this poem...really. I love how deep and thought provoking it is. I have often wondered about this myself.
I hope you are doing well...we've not chatted in so long!
Lorena
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Very good poem. Love the words you choose. Loved it. makes poeple question, and i feel your sarcasism and retortion in this as well. keep it up.
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Not only did you choose a difficult and controversial
subject, you tackled it extremely well and with real
talent. I like this very much. The style is so good and
your words ring with truth. Got the message too.
You trying to put me out of a job?
Right back atcha ~ criss
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good stuff. I find it very difficult to write anything involving religoun. I like how the poem had a lot of different feels to it, at least for me. The beggining felt a bit darker or hrash in tone, but in a casual way.
the second stanza has a neutral observational feel to it.
the last stanza was clever and funny.
I'm suprised you looked my 31 poems. I hope you didn't read them all. Well, yeah, i figured i'd give this place another shot. talk to you later. -
Maybe there has been but you just haven't noticed?
Anyways, I am a christain and I understand that you are atheist, many poets, friends, try to shove their morals and beliefs down my throat and I hate it, so I won't do the same to you. I will only say that I respect you as a fellow poet and most importantly, my friend ... its nice to read a piece from you once again, thank you for all the comments that you leave me, you always leave a smile on my face 
Sara
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Wow! I love the imagery and originality of this poem! I know exactly how you feel. I was told for the first time last month that I better make up my mind about my faith or I'm going to go to hell - that I'm running out of time. I am currently agnostic but considering Paganism. I do not speak about religion at all because one, I don't feel comfortable talking about it, two, I don't want to be harrassed because of it, and three, I just don't want to argue or offend anyone. I just wish some people would be more acceptant of others - some people in this world are too ignorant and judgemental to understand.
Just know that there are people out there (including me o^_^o) that cherish and accept who you are no matter what.
I love you. <3
~Grace
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