As the world sleeps at night
The sky is wide awake
Darkened by fear; lite by hope
waiting for time to take
Determined for the sun to rise
Awaiting the world to wake
But darkness proceeds it's path
Timeless Life it then will make
The skies light begins to dim
The winds melody now Whispering
Blinded by dark grey clouds
Drops of rain are now falling
Endless cries the wind speaks
The stars no longer shining
Because no matter the time of day
The rain just keeps falling
Author notes
it is pretty self explanitory...i am the sky and i am lonely and crying every night. i wrote these while i was crying and i chose to hide it from those i love.
Written August 29th, 2005
A contest entry
- Lost Hope by Lacer.
300 points, ended September 4, 2005, 34 entries
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Good write, I enjoyed reading it
Original, the flow is good and overall I would give you an A
Thanks for commenting my poetry, very much appreciated
Greetz -
This is a great write. I absolutly love it. Reach for the stars and never stop writting. Tnx for the applause on my poem.
Much love,
SHanna -
This is very sad. I love the way that you are the sky, and the rain is your tears. That's really original. It's a beautiful piece of work, I enjoyed reading it a lot. I hope things look up for you soon. Amazing write!
P.S. If you smile, the stars will shine with you. (Kinda corny I know. Lol.) Take care.
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