Broken glass
Blood of ink
Hint of heart
And blink.
Red face fairy rising in the star of night
With anxious light
The rose at moon glows gray.
Author notes
Diction is what?
I obviously used the list of words 
This is purely what I call, experimental poetry. When I read the list of words, I liked the sound of them. I endeavored to write a piece using these words by adding as little to them as necessary. All critiques are welcome. You don't have to like it for me to want to know what you think
Written August 28th, 2005
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Lol, thanks for the comment and for stopping by for a visit . As you can see by the previous comments, it didn't impress the contest holder much
. Of course, I welcome comments, good or bad. We all have our own taste. I am such a wordy person that I like to practice a less is more approach as often as I can Besides, it is fun. Poetry should be fun 
Thanks again for commenting and for the applause
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Liked this one.
Okay and I can see this style myself. How interesting these little tidbits of information indeed. It would be a unique thing to try. -
Thank you for your comments. I welcome feedback on my writing. I think every author should. Most of us like the sound of our own voices. Honest oppinions are how we learn to actually say anything important enough to be heard.
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Good write.
Well this is a good write. But it seems like you didn't write enough. It is good, but it just doesn't have enough power. The only thing i can tell you is either redo it or just add on, cause it seems like you have talent, but you just don't have enough power in it. I would either see you try and do it over or add on but i just know that you can do so much better. Sorry if you take it personal, but you have more talent than this... just let your mind flow... don't think too much...
Well Lots of love, Ally
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