Avvelena i Daggers by wbiro at All poetry

She sends me poisoned daggers now,
avvelena i daggers,
to pierce this heart that has wronged her.
she has bled, and so now I bleed.

Will our blood mingle
into a new, enduring love
or simply remain the poison
she sends me?

We are beyond words now;
these poison daggers are all that remain.

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A point in many relationships. Some turn out well, some do not.

'avvelena i daggers' is Italian for 'poison daggers'
Written August 28th, 2005

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wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thanks for the comment, Ms. Kitty! and my condolences to you for all the daggers you may have received (and thrown!)
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thanks for the comment, Ms. Sad, on my 'Poison Daggers' piece. Yes, sad, but not the end in every case, and I think this one may in the end turn out well...
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thanks for your astute and experienced comment here, Porcelian, and for reminding me that great joy does come with great complications...!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thank you Rae for the comment here. Lesson- do not trifle with love, even on AP!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Yes, daggers today, love tomorrow, mum! At least I hope, and in it's proper form this time!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Tnanks for the comment, Mr. Dark! Relationships poison? Perhaps thay all are at one time or another. This one? Well worth the pain and poison if it works out well in the end...!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thanks for the comment, Cyb! Trouble in paradise- well, do not trifle with love on AP, it's the reason I needed a vacation from paradise!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thanks, Sir Dakkon, for the acute comment! Yes, this relationship swings back and forth, through joy and pain, and to think it's 'only' an AP relationship! Love can be painful, even on AP!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thanks, Sam, you have accurately interpreted this piece- and may I add one detail you may have not realized- do not trifle with love, even on AP!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thanks for the comment, and an applause for your acute perception! Yes, love, even on AP, can be painful and tragic!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thanks for the comment, Osarkon, on this 'Poison Dagger' piece. The 'avvelena i daggers' is Italian for 'poison daggers', and hot-blooded daggers they are!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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thank you, aby, for the comment! Yes, love, even on AP, can hurt!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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I didn't know what you were saying in Italian, but it was beautiful! (then you translated!) Yes, grabbing for too much can be suicide with anyone, and I hope our relationship is settling into it's proper father/daughter union. May we both consider it a blessing and cherish it!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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thank you, snooky! A high honor indeed is your comment here!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thanks for the comment, manu, yes, when one receives daggers, it is well not to throw them back too quickly!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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thanks, cat! long time no hear! Maybe too many daggers, but then saying it over and over again reveals how they are hated! Daggers. Daggers. Curse these daggers!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thank you for commenting on my 'Poison Daggers' piece- the daggers love? I can only hope! Yes, do not trifle with love on AP!
wbiro
August 29, 2005
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Thank you, mistic! Love on the Internet (and AP!) should not be trifled with!
wbiro
August 28, 2005
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Vini, you do not need to make choices, for I am your AP dad, and that is my proper, and blessed, an now cherished place.
FallingSideways
August 28, 2005
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Those homing butter knives can be somewhat unexpected.
moral: which is often thought harmless and dull can still cut
Well as such things are sometimes unexpected, I have a readily supply of band-aids and guaze.
*hugs*
Mannequin
August 28, 2005
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I've been there and done that but I was never able to express the feelings so clearly and efficiently. Very nicely done.
HerXghost
August 28, 2005
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how sad...
Porcelain Doll
August 28, 2005
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Eep hun... Yep, I've been there before...I really hope things work out... this is a wonderful poem. With great joy comes great complications it seems... but maybe things will settle. Chaos isn't indefinate... everything has an end. It will be okay. Beautiful poem. I saw no errors ^.^ I love this
~Amy
B Chandler
August 28, 2005
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suga come out of hiding ur name i miss seeing it. as for this poem the sadness is felt throughout the words but always keep in mind that u got friends who love u dear and bump those who try to put u down
Rae
Touchof1der
August 28, 2005
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Standing to the side as I type this so as not to be struck by any daggers. I'm not very fond of the idea of flying daggers pointed your way. This has me very concerned. We need to sit down and have a long chat sweetie. In the meantime... take good care of yourself. Stay safe and be well.
(`'•.¸(`'•.¸ ¤ ¸.•'´)¸.•'´)
~~~Touchof1der~~~
(, .•'(¸.•'´ ¤ `'•.¸)`'•.¸)
Darknight poet
August 28, 2005
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GOOD LITTLE WRITE
I HAVE SEEN ALL THE POISON AND NOW I AM DONE
RELATIONSHIPS SUCK IN WORLD
Cyber Artist
August 28, 2005
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A tragedy worthy of Shakespeare I do trust there is no trouble in paradise...
Paul
Lovely Luci
August 28, 2005
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Bravo
This was very well written. It's a pity that relationships can turn so dark when all you want is to find that special someone. Hell, I probably sound like an idiot saying that, but this was pretty good. It managed to cram a lot of anger into a very little poem. Well done and bravo on this piece.

With a sword of hope and a pen of darkness,

Sir Dakkon
guardian angel 1416
August 28, 2005
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Remarkably done!
wonderfully written and descriptively depicted with angst, depths of a hearts pain, and the sheer torment of this soul trying to deal with two hearts. ( my interpretation. )
Wonderfully done!! thank you for this offering!
Fearless Leader
August 28, 2005
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Nice usage of symbolism - daggers. The symbol of tragic love!
Osarkon
August 28, 2005
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Wow a great write! is the title in some other language? 'avvelena i daggers' . Dont quite understand it, but still sounds good ^_^. Well done! ~ Osarkon
hot babe30
August 28, 2005
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Well Done!!
Bravo!
this is great!
but it like
hurts you kno?
its pretty small but alot of
passion
good write
good job!
much luv,
aby
Yorworstnightmare
August 28, 2005
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WOW.....This was an excelent write,normally I put in a comment that the poem is really good or, great,but yuors was excelent!!
this is the best ppoem i have read so far in the featured box,
most are not exclent but this indeed was excelent and very ecelently written by a excelent author!I love the background to this how did you get it?? And the border is tight too!!
well thats all I have to say!!
~May your days be bright and the clouds be chased away~
snooky bear
manoguru
August 28, 2005
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this is a job well done... very imaginative... a trouble can either to a cold war or a reconciliation...
nolonger
August 28, 2005
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Yo me siento este tanto dolí. Los puñales de Poision, el me perfora cada día, las elecciones para ser hechas, alguna herida más entonces los otros, pero el corazón que yo nunca quise para marcar. y de algún modo a de todos modos. su la enfermedad de mi empujar lejos. Yo me siento como veneno.nunca toma un sorbo, nunca sed para la sangre de mí.o manchó hago labios para tocar el corazón, sea de sólo suicidarse.

" feel this so much I hurt. Poision daggers,the pierce me every day, choices to be made, some hurt more then others, but your heart i never wanted to scar. and somehow to anyway. its the sickness of my pushing away.
I feel like poison.never take a sip,never thirst for me.Or blood tainted I make lips.to touch my heart, is only to commit suicide"
Always
~ vini ~
Cat
August 28, 2005
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I think you use the word dagger too many times. It seems to distract from the poem. If you could find some substitute for the word on at least one occasion you would have a stronger poem.

M
August 28, 2005
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This is short. But it says so much. I like the concept of a poison dagger. Could the poison be love? Or maybe I'm mistaken, but that's what i got out of it. In any case, i really liked this. Keep up the good work, kay?
~HakanaiHane
dark-shadow
August 28, 2005
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very nicely written alot of emotion in this small poem good job
misticmoonlite
August 28, 2005
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awesome
a lot of anger poured into a little poem,well written best of luck and god bless!