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To a land of dreams
A place to be free
Somewhere in the night
Beyond the stars
On a journey
Of pure fantasy
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Traveling upon
Silver lined clouds
Through the soft
Whispering winds
A place where my
Fantasy becomes reality
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Drifting off to sleep
Beneath the moons light
Taking me into
A night of sheer bliss
Letting me be loved
As I never thought I could be
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Written August 26th, 2005
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Wow, this poem was wow.
When I sit here and read your poems I am always blown away at the power and feelings you let loose in your works. I am simply in awe at this poem. So simply written yet telling multitudes of emotions. I love how you just sit there and let your emotions run wild as you pen these poems. I bet you just sat down after the kids were in bed and let it out. Had been thinking about this poem all day while you were working and doing your million and one everyday things and was like. I GOT IT! Made dinner, fed the kids and put them in bed and sat down and let it POUR out of your soul. I LOVE this poem and what it speaks to me. Wonderfully written. You are one damn fine poetess!!!
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always!!!
Summer -
Thank you love....It's just something that came to me late last night. No idea from where but I just ran with it...LOL
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wow I like the way you did this.....It is very subtle and still it speaks with image.. Love the pic and the fade of your words...still in all...It speaks and tells a story...And I love a good poetic story....I applaude you...super job moons...
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Malabu -
Yeah.....it was good. Nice poem. The idea is good, I suggest you make it better. Make it as good as you can. The theme is really good. Check out my poem- "The Land of Dreams" since you mentioned the phrase in the first verse. lol
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You do a good job with your placement of the letters "fading away," that's very nice. if you wanted to change anything, I would watch out for the short stanzas. They make the poem kind of fragmented, and it seems to me you were going for more of a flowy feel here. Also, I would double check some of your word choice, like "beyond the stars," "silver lined clouds," "whispering winds." Try to avoid clicheed phrases and think of ways to express your ideas that are uniquely you. Use your imagination, I'm sure you'll think of something great. This poem has a lot of potential, I encourage you to make it the best you can.
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Hmm... different. But good. I liked it... keep it up.
x.x Becca
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