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the unwanted

forget me
i was never here

never burned, en flamed brighter
than the light before the moon

cast me aside
in a bitter wave of untrusting souls
bitter fools

play upon them
cast upon them your pitiful smile

and remain here

outside of your Eden,
(your utopia)

thats where this shadow gleams
shimmers upon the wall

just like them
like them all

all of these unwanted things
that dared to want you

unwanted nothings

and unwanted me

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Written August 26th, 2005

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  • Mortal
    November 3, 2006
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    Great

    Amazing! the meaning resounds in my mind and the words cut like well placed kicks to the heart a true message if i ever saw one you have a really great flow in this poem i can almost hear you reading it

  • MollysWall
    August 27, 2005
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    Quite a darkside if I ever saw one! You words resound like hallowed echoes in my mind, give me goosebumps... I like this very much, the desriptions you use make it that much powerful, many poets don't use that tool of description well -brighter than the light before... for example pitiful smile rather than smile give it that much more of a visual impact you see whare I am going Anyway, nice I enjoyed reading

    ~Amy