My heart aches from this called love.
When it truly means you can't always have that someone from up above.
I all I ever wanted was give and receive the love.
My heart cries my vision is a bluer my mind can not sleep I can't even hardly eat.
Where did it go wrong? what could have we done to save it.
My heart aches with pain as it cries as my soul slowly dies.
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Written August 26th, 2005
A contest entry
- Even if the love is gone, the heartbreak is always there... by WhenWillsCollide.
1063 points, ended November 9, 2007, 9 entries
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well done
Im srry I dnt have time to really comment htis piece well, I have to finish the contest soon :[
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it ok thanks for reading.
Amber
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I think it is very nice.But I would change the structur a bit Idont like the box poems i think it would look a lot better if you make it a new line after each period but that is just my advice thank you for shairng this with me.Best wishes
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Thanks for reading and the advise.
Amber
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Just another poem I came up with tell me what you think.
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