a wild event
too many moments to remember
all people I know!
laughter, dancing, smiles, hugs
will the memories stay?
our friends attacking the dancefloor
ou first dance
greeting family - their happy faces!
getting salt
Bob's, Katie's, Dave's, My Parent's, and Ashley's toasts
not having to clean up!
and realizing that 10 days of together-aloneness
can change who we are forever
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Written August 26th, 2005
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You know. this says so much, and tells a full story of feelings and emotions captured during such a hectic day, snippets blurred together. I think its only later on in the following months and years that one remembers in fine detail that whole day as it expands in your memories.
Yes, ten days of bliss which do change your lives together. Beautifully expressed
I really enjoyed and 'felt' the excitement through your words.
Ann -
kevin and moderators ...
I see wierdo problems in my poems I try to post ...
kindly request you to clear the mess
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i really really like this, its really good, and the
"and realizing that 10 days of together-aloneness
can change who we are forever" was really nicely said, as if an entire essay, into just a few words. i like this a lot.. great write..
Love always
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"and realizing that 10 days of together-aloneness
can change who we are forever"
I woul dhave to strongly agree with this, I've been around people who you can be around for months and not really cange, but then there are those people who quickly changes your life in was you never expected. This poem was short, and sweet, and you did an awesome job on putting it together. -
Yay.
I always love simple poems, especially when they can make me smile. Poetry is one way of nearly expressing anything that seems far from expression, and I think this poem does an amazing job of that. I always feel like emotions, though meant to be expressed, are never expressed the way we wish them to be, unless we write it down on paper. Whenever another reads what you have written, it's like they take in the energy of the poem and feel it themselves.
I can see you are an experienced poet and I really respect your style. I would really be honored if you stopped by and read the first few poems I have posted. I've just started my membership here and it would be great to be critiqued by such a wonderful poet.
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Very true. I love this poem. It dances across my mind, the flow of words used was amazing. The richness of tranquility that is succeeded in this poem is far out. I love it
Well live on and live again. Cya
-Kenny -
This is just the beginning of many family festivities to come. I am sure there are many photographs to age with you and your lovely wife. I pray the two of you have the best Christmas and your marriage last as long as mine has so far. (33 years and counting).
Be blessed,
Renee
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Sounds like the forever memories to me. I never thought of how much those first days alone together meant. Like bonding with a newborn...maybe the most important moments of your new lives. Very nice Kev...missing an R in the seventh line.
Sam
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wow!!!this sounds like a happy moment to remember . what a fun write i rearly see around .great job
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i really liked the second letter of the last line. it reminded me i had some change in my pocket. this poem was a pocket of memories. good- job!
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I believe this may be the first of your poems that I have ever read. I really like the style of it. I will mention the 7th line, should that be "our first dance"?
I love how this come across in shorts blast of memory. Yet it really put a picture in my mind of what the time may have been like, I vacation, a family getaway.
Just very neatly done.
Anna -
needs microwaving.
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Kinda reminds me of those poems you do in primary school...where the teacher asks you to remember something you did over the summer holidays....yeah....brings me back to my youth...maybe 5, 6 years old....very, very young
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Very nice happy poem. You have one typo that is barely evident amid the content and the flow.
ou first dance
Should --ou-- be our?
The poem flow along nicely enough that I didnt notice it till second reading. Thanks for sharing it with us
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awwwwwwwww i love this poem it is really good and it can really make a person think i know it sure made me and i totally get what you are saying with this poem and it is a really great poem i loved it plz keep posting abnd i will keep reading cuz i loved this keep it up!!
love ya
~*becca*~
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two thunbs up and a foot.
This was very simple and rich on our friendships that we cherish. Thank you Kevin for your lovely words of encouragement and the surprize points....God bless will put you on my favs so I can keep updated with your new poems that come along. -
I would say not bad, quite better than my disgusting sad poems. Keep on writing Kevin... hope to read more happy writes from you.
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Not bad--ore truth than your older stuff--more style too.
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All those moments, the excitement, anxiety, looks shared, glimpses between handshakes and hugs...you've shared with us a very special time in your life And I for one am so happy for you and your new bride. And...hey, it's nice to have you back, Kevin ...we missed you, I missed you
Love and blessings to you both
Dee
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This makes me think of a honeymoon. It's cute and happy.
Just a suggestion, maybe you can put a little more feeling and description in it. It would be even better!
My favourite line is the Not having to clean up! line. I don't like cleaning up either.
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Wonderful and reminds me that its the little things we do in life that mean the most (like getting salt). The people we know we'll always remember. It was good to read about your awesome 10 days and I hope you have a lot more like that.
Seeing I was here to im a grumbling complaint I thought it only fair to leave a comment as well!
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i thoguht this write was good, since i dont know the instpiration behind it its harder for me to like it, but i really do enjoy the style used in this pieace, as well as the word choice and flow, there wasint much imagrey to speak of, over all it would have been a better write if 1, i knew the inspiration behind it, and two with more imagre, keep writting, love, aandolin
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excellent
Kevin,this is a well written and well stated poem, I enjoyed the flow of the words..very nice, -
just lately i have been thinking along these lines at how little we remember...we have hours and hours of fun and happiness and only remember a fraction and i did a poem on it called bits. sometimes moments if they are happy can leave you sad for them and if they are sad leave you sad. you can't win. the ending is beautiful and very poignant. its nice to have someone else to share everything with and together aloneness is a great term for it. i remember being 18 and cooking ships with my boyfriend in his parents kitchen and thinking how great it would be when we had our own place and cooked chips together. yes food features very largely in my life. i love chips.chips are so romantic.
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life is such a sensual and exciting journey, isn't it? Nice, smooth piece sir/
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Must be nice having people commenting on your work.
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You have not only brought your talent to AP, but by creating AP you brought more talent on...that improved within time! This piece is really something! Well, I cannot critique it! It is way better than anything that I could write! Keep up the great work!
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Congratulations on writing your newest chapter together, Kevin. I know you will be very, very happy...may this new step bring you two closer together to each other and to your Selves!!!
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The Kevin awaketh on AP again! It's nice to 'see' you. And this is a lovely summary. Thanks for sharing with us nosey romantics
ou first dance
our
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mmmmmm together-aloneness...I cant wait for that.
Ivan and I wont be able to take our honeymoon til a few months after the wedding due to me breastfeeding and the baby will only be a couple months old then, but I do look forward to having time with just US sometime next summer
I hope your wedding and honeymoon was everything you hoped it would be and more
congrats
Jen -
not having to clean up .. hmmm. just walking away from the mess. Did you?
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This was a really thought Provoking write! it really made me think about things that happen around us...great insight!...wow...the last two lines kinda brought the reality of it together....great write Kevin
Fern
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