by ~Gregg Rowe
Where my angels have feared to tread at night
I am upon another universe
I appeal – ancestors to Aphrodite
Interferon injections – given me
From my mother’s womb – I carry my heart
Pegatron, triple comb – fruit loops sans cream
I’ve seen eternity’s internal light
In G-d’s country, I’ve seen the Will, -- the Truth
Where my angels have feared to tread at night
Heart, Hep, HIV – Holy Trinity
Avec these meds, I feel my body crash
From my mother’s womb – I carry my heart
A silver moon kiss Venus sends in flight
And world problems initiate my curse
I appeal – ancestors to Aphrodite
Premature ejaculation I flash
During a summer night performing love
Avec these meds, I feel my body crash
Coloured nightmares reveal my final plight
I dream I rode my final road by hearse
Where my angels have feared to tread at night
G-d shows me the protected latex glove
Reach internal sexual levelled bliss
During a summer night performing love
I vision feeling the warm white insight
The Will, --the Truth – my darkness at its worse
I appeal – ancestors to Aphrodite
Blond Greek god leans forward – send me a kiss
My heart’s chambers full – accepting our pain
Reach internal sexual levelled bliss
This platitude – this level! -- Oh, Insight!
I am reborn into another mirth
Where my angels have feared to tread at night
I appeal – ancestors to Aphrodite
You have opened doors, shown me my life’s gains
Interferon injections – given me
My heart’s chambers full – accepting our pain
Pegatron, triple comb – fruit loops sans cream
Author notes
Number 10
What is a hybridanelle?
by Erin Thomas
allpoetry.com/Column/1086828
Written August 25th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Fixed Poetry by Whispered Devotions.
500 points, ended November 4, 2005, 11 entries
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wow, that was very interesting. don't worry, it's in a good way. it's always good to read something different, keeps life interseting. good luck in the contest and keep writing!
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Wonderful usage of words and it seems a great deal of emotion and time consuming work was put into this piece; however I am confused on the meaning. Good job and good luck.
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this is very interesting. it's a little difficult for me to grasp in some ways, but this could be more to do with a difference of life-styles and predicaments. for instance, i looked up Pegatron in my dictionary and it wasn't there, so i googled it to see what i might learn and discovered it's a medication that treats viral hepatitis. i understand that any kind of trouble with the liver is far, far, far from fun.
you lead into and out of the refrains smoothly enough. this poem overall has a meditative feel, but with oddly resentful overtones. this could possibly translate into a sense of reluctant resignation.
the painting you've got at the top is pretty evocative. your mind seems to draw abstract relationships between many things. i refer to this capability as ARR (Abstract Relational Referencing)--it's a very handy talent to have in life, very handy. a very high ARQ (Abstract Relational Quotion) is genius of its own sort, but not on the level of a high IQ, which tends to be a lot drier and more rigid in nature--lacking adaptability. those with a high ARQ, however, tend to be hyper-adaptable. you can fling them into any situation and they find a way to first survive, and in time, thrive. something tells me you have a fairly high ARQ. -
Yes, this is courageous, honest, real, and full of that which msut be written.
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Gregg, as always another wonder of a write comes from you. You're brave attitude in regards to your condition, and you're ability to form just the right words to describe all that you think never cease to amaze me. You like your writing are a wonder.
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This has got to be the most heartfelt poem ive ever read
Absolutely Splendid....Thank You For Sharing
Angel -
Cool beans diggin that pic -rob-
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Wow I thought this was really good. Very good insight and a very good use of words. If you want you may come and check out some of my writes. I would greatly appreciate it if you did. Thank you and again very good write. Keep on writting.
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Duana: yes, this is my very first attempt at one, I have been working on it for two weeks. It was for my course The Poetry of ABCs given by Anna Goose and I just had to attempt one to say I tried the form. Thanks for the wonderful critique and good luck in penning yours.
Gregg
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This is tight as hell, I love the flow of this poem and it was just wondeful, excellent job keep up the nice work
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eek gags suga this is absolue perfection of pure rawness and the flow not only served one purpose but doubled with the sheer immense power-subtleness keep up the great work
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OH and here's applause. I know how much work goes into something like this!
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hi. well you sure wiped mine right off the map! This is exceptional. Have you written them before? I just wrote my first one, and I knew it sucked, but after reading yours I realize just how much it sucks, lol. Of course it's not finished yet, but the seed of potential isn't even there to match yours. Anyway, I enjoyed yours- and maybe one day in the future I will be able to write like this- or maybe not- only time will tell.
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