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Cold

She came to me on that cool summer day
unusual as the weather, my breath taken away
hair bright as night
eyes as dark as the sun
that cackling cold voice musing
“this is the one”

She came taking away the doubt
fear quickly blossomed, the love inside
too longingly new
quenchingly familiar
the muse whispered darkly
“shine like the sun”

She left with my heart intact
so like the rest, strange in my silence
soul bright like death
heart as hard as taffy
knowingly the voice whispered
“you are the only one”

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Written August 24th, 2005

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  • Katie Jo
    August 24, 2005
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    this is a very sweet poem. Put tons of pictures into my mind and makes me wonder who plays who for characters..absolutely delightful poem!..keep it up!
    --Katie Jo