If I could tell myself
Would I listen?
There's things inside
That I could never voice
For one reason or another
But always because I
Would never be forgiven
That which is the most
Important to me in the view
Of others, does not hold truth
And will never be told
Because no one really knows
What is important to me
I've lived lies, and told them too
But no one knows to what extent
I'm not sure I really do either...
Author notes
Written on 25th August at 02:57 GMT
The most truthful thing I've ever written ever... I'm scared...
Written August 24th, 2005
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A contest entry
- Your Thoughts in 20 lines or less - Ends tonight! by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended August 31, 2005, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I really like this poem. I can relate to it. And it is hard to tell the truth especially when others will not approve of it. Great Write!
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crystaldust 13-09-05 17:53
Very interesting: I like it a lot. I like the way th words and form carry the thoughts forward to the inevitably questioning end. Good write. -
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Damn, this is haunting! Very well done to say the least. I think it is the honesty displayed here that really captures the reader, a sense of appeal that it has a bit of each of us in there, if only a tad. It looks beyond the mask into the reality of us. This one lingers with you. Exceptionally done. Blessings, Gypsy
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Great
wow...
so many thoughts come to mind from so few words
this realy grabs your attention...
and brings out emotions and feelings that relate -
"I've lived lies, and told them too
But no one knows to what extent
I'm not sure I really do either..."
Fantastic ending. Very poignant & thought provoking. The entire piece is amazing, but I tend to lean towards endings, to see how it will all come together.
Well penned. Best of luck in the contest!!
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This is something I can relate to in ways, too. But I get a feel that you need this:
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