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I mentally undress you

I mentally undress you.
Feel the walls.
Of your.
Beating heart.
Sense the spirit.
Of your.
Free soul.
Flirt with.
The supple skin.
Of your.
Child-like mind.

Then.
Does it matter.
If I can grasp.
Your C-cup.
Or enter.
Myself.
In you.

Cause.
I''ve already.
Entered you.
When I.
Mentally undress you.

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Written August 24th, 2005

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  • Chocolate Poetry
    July 17, 2006
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    Wow this is beautifully written... Very nice. I love the short sticato like lines... It's perfect.


  • Sabrinasgarden
    July 17, 2006
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    Stunning write just felt you may have used too many full stops which has impacted on the flow..but here's hoping someone mentally undresses me sometime! Thanks for the read!


  • dreamrose976
    July 17, 2006
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    Four stars!!

    This is an awesome poem! it is simple, yet incredibly provacative, romantic, and intriging! Great job!


  • zzzzz gold member
    January 7, 2006
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    Alluring

    Eye love it! Sensual, provocative, and witty...also, visually appealing...my type of write....Great job!

  • koolgal
    September 19, 2005
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    Oh it's awesome.I'm love struck.The poem is full of love and emotion.How romantically you've written.Thanks a lot for the nice write.

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