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Paint Me As A Bad Guy...

Paint me as a bad guy - give it all that you can give
Say that I'm a sad guy who does not deserve to live
Say that I'm responsible for everything that's wrong
Paint me as a bad guy and be sure to make it strong.

Treat me like a soccer ball or football - take your pick.
Let your foot fly forward with a swift, resounding kick.
Let me know my worthlessness is based on real fact
Paint me as a bad guy with your righteousness intact.

Al Capone was just a piker - I'm the enemy
Hell's Angels nothing more than bikers when compared to me
Paint that bullseye on my back and let your arrows fly
Paint me as a bad guy - who deserves it more than I?

Spread my sins out on the table - serve them up for lunch
Tell me  how pure evil seeps out from me as you munch
Stick that dagger in my back and twist it, if you dare
Paint me as a bad guy....Guess what? I don't really care...

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Written August 23rd, 2005

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  • Kari gold member
    July 22, 2007

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    Dude, right on man. I can so relate to this poem right now and saving it to my favorites. All of us go through rooms filled with smoke sometimes. Incredible job I totally loved it!


  • JustADutchie gold member
    September 17, 2005
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    Paint you as a bad guy?
    How could I, Balladeer
    Your humor and your skillfull write
    Got me hooked I fear.


  • Balladeer
    August 28, 2005
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    Hah! Last time I let a girl paint me, she got pigment!! Don't do that no more!!


  • Touchof1der silver member
    August 27, 2005
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    I had to come back here just because I like it and I've been thinking... the whole title you know... begging to be painted. I am such a sucker when a man's beg. Since nobody else offered to paint you... I will. I have my feathery soft brush and lots of colorful hues on hand. Now.... where shall we start?
    (`'•.¸(`'•.¸ ¤ ¸.•'´)¸.•'´)
    ~~~Touchof1der~~~
    (, .•'(¸.•'´ ¤ `'•.¸)`'•.¸)

    Edited on Aug 28, 2:48 because ''.

  • Balladeer
    August 27, 2005
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    Thank you, Dee! Actually, there WAS a song written about me....Mack the Knife! No, I haven't written in a while...trying to get my donkey in gear. Thank you for being there

  • Balladeer
    August 27, 2005
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    Thank you, miss! Hopefully I can quell a bit of that disappointment if my muse gts off its butt and gets to work! Thank you for such a kind reply. Be well


  • daedal labyrinth
    August 27, 2005
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    avast maties

    relieved am I to discover you'd not been abducted by aliens or other malignantly curious lifish forms. Your writing is extremely appealing to me and it is with mounting disappointment that I would sign in day after day to discover no new offering from you. I like your rhythm and way of describing things. I appreciate, too, your mad creativity as it bubbles out in unexpected mirthful poppings. Thank you for writing again.

    I liked this piece, in addition to the chosen theme with which it is presented. Sorry you feel like you're the bad guy... I'm having difficulty putting you in that position simply because YOU WROTE SOMETHING. Well done. Don't be a stranger here, okay?


  • AerinAlanna
    August 26, 2005
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    *laughs* How more realistic can you get? I'm an angel to some, a bad girl to others, but only because I care about life and morality. Well, the story of my life.

    ~Amanda


  • BonBon
    August 25, 2005
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    You no bad guy Deer. Yo is just a sweet, little ole powder-puff.
    Hugs BonBon


  • August 24, 2005
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    I like the sarcasm in this one a lot. I used to have a poem posted called 'Make me a real girl' ..with very similar emotion as this one. Wrote it when I was a mod..but it was about things happening at my workplace IRL ..anyway..this really reminded me of it ..and the way I felt when I wrote it...and the sarcasm ..well it made my day

  • Munda
    August 24, 2005
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    Of course I dare! All that and more! Heck you're the "baddest" I know, but a great storyteller. Another great poem from your pen Balladeer and muchly enjoyed by the Dutchie.


  • SusanL
    August 24, 2005
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    Bravo!
    This is most excellent! It is great to see someone standing up for themselves and though verbal arrows can occasionally smart they can't physically damage.
    Keep it Goin!
    Susan


  • August 24, 2005
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    Hey, I know the sentiment of this one! Dang, sucks to be painted as a bad guy when you're merely blunt, honest and say what people don't want to hear but need to. Story of my life, lol. I liked it, great one!

    Jenn


  • catz Moderators member
    August 24, 2005
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    Welll... geeze, Michael....you don't have to be painted as a bad guy...you ARE a bad guy....bad to the bone...see, there's even been a song about you Why do you think you were made a Moderator??!!

    Always a pleasure reading your well written and enjoyable poetry, bad guy or not This one is right in there with the best. And it's nice to see something new from you, seems like it's been awhile
    Okay....I'll go now ...

    Love and
    Dee


  • August 24, 2005
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    Hehehe. Delightfully crafted piece. You've even got the pirate ship and the bones of the martyrs in their watery tombs. Oh well, nothing wrong with being sensitive. Smashing poem.


  • MargaretG
    August 24, 2005
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    Why is it that the people who pillory others are so angry? Dr. Jung would say, hm, misplaced shadow.
    I love your meter and rhyme, you are always adept.


  • Roseleaf
    August 24, 2005
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    kool :)

    you made my day


  • Ogreatbaldone gold member
    August 24, 2005
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    oh man, i bee ndown that road before, more than once , so its safe to say that you are our resident bad guy? Phew! that takes the heat off of me. peace


  • fae
    August 24, 2005
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    You go! Well written and ah pretty hilarious

    Tell me how pure
    extra space in there

  • Touchof1der silver member
    August 24, 2005
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    Well... if I remember correctly... you did tell me once that you was one bad ass dude! I thought you were just kidding! I didn't know you really meant it. Gulp! I take back all those cheap shots I made when you weren't looking. By the way, you look great in leather but what are all the chains for?
    ♥ Kimberly


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    August 24, 2005
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    Well said, Mr. Mike!! If everyone likes you it can't be all that good. Keep it rollin'


  • Maatkara gold member
    August 23, 2005
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    Good one, Mike "It's good to be hated by the right people", as Johnny Cash said.

    ~G


  • Steven Morris
    August 23, 2005
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    I like it! So personal and so much raw emotion, kudos! enter applause here - Steven

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