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Portrait of a Young Man Losing Manhood With a Chronic Illness (A-Z-A Poem)

Missing image
by ~Gregg Rowe~

anemic zombie asks:
"Boyhood youthful bones
changed?!"  X-rays consulted --
discretely we discuss
everything.  Vortices's engulf
fuels under fortitude's.
Gaiety travels ghoulishly
here.  Shit hits
internal religious institutions --
judges quaint Jesuits --
knowledge produces kerfuffles.
Lies overrule linkage.
Mother numbs me
mending nobody's muses
like our lineage:
kings produced kralls --
just quiz Jesus.
I remember Ireland
her savoir-faire haunts
Gregory's temple ghost --
fatherhood:  under fire
exists vehement evil --
down where death
chimes.  Xylophones convert
bones.  Youth breaks --
AZT, Zerit, anti-depressants.

Author notes

The flow of the poem is within its cryptic letters and finding words that are easily juxtaposed in the middle to tell a complete story.

a-z-a
b-y-b
c-x-c
d-w-d
e-v-e
f-u-f
g-t-g
h-s-h
i-r-i
j-q-j
k-p-k
l-o-l
m-n-m
and now reverse your way back down through the alphabet in the same order:
m-n-m
l-o-l...etc
Written August 23rd, 2005

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  • PrettyRagDoll
    November 28, 2006
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    Intense

    Your word choices blew me away. I have never seen a set-up like "a-z-a" ect before and that also blew me away. The intensity of your words and the seriousness of the subject matched each other flawlessly. Thank you for entering my contest and thank you for sharing your words.
    -d0ll

  • Xx Bloody Thorn xX
    November 27, 2005
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    I didn't see a poem in this at all..sorry but it had me a bit lost... I don't understand a word in this...it seemed more like a story instead of a poem *LEAH*


  • iamlost gold member
    September 15, 2005
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    wow, this is a very strange and great poem. good luck in the contest!


  • Misfitdepressive
    August 28, 2005
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    wow/! Now this IS original I LOVED IT it was a little confusing but thats the point people need to read it again to get the ful feel of it just check the first line im sure you could do somehtin with that any way good luck


  • dp robertson
    August 23, 2005
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    This is nice work indeed. There is only one thing worse than aging and that is doing so with chronic illness because it damages dreams and crushes hope. This is a stunning reminder of the power that can be generated in such a juxtaposed jumble of sharp images. This is very good.

    David

    I won’t ask how you are feeling- shat off and worn out would be two- phases that would spring to mind- anyway, good work and thinking of you

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