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Loving Desperation



Lonely hearts cry in the night
Filled with a longing
Of love and desperation

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Written August 23rd, 2005

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  • leander Moderators member
    August 25, 2005
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    It seems like you have changed the order of the syllables with this one... traditional haiku count 17 syllables, formatted as 5-7-5... in this one I countest 7-5-7... I'm not sure if I have found your AHA-moment neither... allthough I can tell that this sounds like the beginning of a splendig, longer poem

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 23, 2005
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    Awesome!

    So few words, so much said within them...Love the choice of words used, loved the background, picture, and the way this hits you when you read it! For many of souls can relate to this piece me surely thinks! Keep up the great works, and thanks for sharing you!

    Much love to you and yours!
    -Timothy The Poetic Weaver