From her table in the corner, she can see o'er top the bar
To that warm and gentle face with the fascinating scar.
The mouth that curls in knowing smile, the eyes that drink her in
And push her brain to dream of love and long forbidden sin.
Oh lord, she gasps, in wordless voice, as sensuously he stands,
And as he starts to walk her way she wrings perspiring hands.
Ten steps off, she takes a breath, and then he's at her side.
Should she now look up at him . . . or run away and hide?
Her shoulder feels a spreading warmth, his hand is resting there,
And when she turns to look at him, his arm's against her hair.
In voice as rich as chocolate, his words flow o'er her soul.
She feels herself begin to melt, she knows she's lost control.
He bends until they're face to face, and gives her a quick wink.
She sees blue eyes gaze in at her - befuddled, she can't think.
"I'm all alone," he says to her, "at least I was before.
But now I've found perfection's muse, I'll be alone no more."
They're at the table hand in hand, his fingers brush her cheek,
And with each touch she trembles more, her resolution's weak.
Until there's no resistance left, a chance she will not miss.
Then gently, oh so gently, moist lips meet in tender kiss.
Author notes
Hope this meets the requirements of the contest - didn't have too much time so I may chip away a bit tomorrow. Thanks for letting me know.
Written August 22nd, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Write Me A Love Poem ( I must be on your fav. list) by piccola.
400 points, ended August 24, 2005, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seduce Me With Poetry (Age 18+ please) PRE-writes/NEW poems! by Melissa Burns.
300 points, ended June 30, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Love the shyness in it
Nice touch. Anyways thank you for entering my contest, and congrats on your previous gold! Best of luck!!!! 
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Wow..I'm speachless for once! This is a wonderful poem Daddy. It reminds me of when Mike was down here in Florida for the first time. I really liked this poem, Dadddy. Keep up the great penning.
Love,
~*~Kayla Marie~*~
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And I thought I was being BOLD!
This is quite sensual, though! I must say.
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Oh my gosh!!!!!! wow and whoa... goodness Paul!!!!! You have .. wow... well.. I'll tell ya... but not in this comment... whoa... geeze... ummm... can ya tell I'm speechless? I'm thinking a mass applaud is in order for this... wow! ~Melissa
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ohh boy this is pratically genius! words like that flow soo well. keep stuff like this up. i enjoyed it alot.
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I liked the rhythm and ryhme, it all flowed smoothly throughout. The picture wasnt nessesary in my opinion but then I've never been a huge fan of pics. I just wanted to say well done, it reminded me of meeting my fiance and our first date for that you have my thanks and applause.
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Wow, this is so good i can actually see it happening. Bravo.
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Very romantic and it flowed so well. I loved the picture.
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wow that is a really good poem. i think your good but im sure you hear that all the time so it probably wont mean nothing but hey i think your good so keep on writing really good stuff lol
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what a wonderful piece! the twists and turns that are felt throughout the entire piece. beautiful!!
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This has a wonderful build to it. Well done!!
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Paul, for not having much time, you truly put out a beautiful poem! It was captivating, almost like reading a story and I felt the struggle, that internal struggle to ward off something that we know might be trouble. I sensed the tension and the moment when such a choice is made as it was for the woman in this work, a choice she believed was not going in the direction it should have, and yet, ironically, it did go in the direction she wanted. Love to you!--Kel
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This is really good! Makes me wanna go to the nearest bar and find a man like that. I wish u all the best in the contest.
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this was slick and smooth...thoroughly enjoyable and what a treat the rhyme is...it's excellent
you've shown lust at first sight perfectly. i applaud the poet and the poem
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Strangers in the night.
Delicious and warm and so very loving.Oh! those marvellous chance encounters with the perfect stranger.Imagery is wonderful as she nervously prepares herself for that warm,moist and sensuous kiss.lots of luck in the Contedt.There is something very appealing and down to earth about this Poem.Elizabeth. -
this is cool. very good visual affect i must agree. i like the picture too. thank you for sharing your talent with me today and good luck in the contest. viyanna r langager
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This was a nice poem.
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Hi, super poem, a lot of feel, good visuals, nice phrasing, should do well in the comp my friend, was a pleasure to read, you do not need luck, all the best, hugs Di
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Oh how I felt like I was there!
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this is a lovely poem <3
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Nice write, enjoyed it very much. -Al
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Kudos!!!
OMG, This just took my breat away. What a beautiful love poem.
So sensual and yet that hint of shyness in her makes the reader quiver and tingle all over. The rhyming was excellent and it produced such a wonderful flow. The picture you used was great. I am still tingling as I write this comment for you.
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Thank you for sharing this work of art, it is amazing. Sounds like a winner for sure. WOWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!
Joyce
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very well written piece and well chosen use of words to make this wonderful
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Good enough to read over and over again!
In voice as rich as chocolate, his words flow o'er her soul.
Excellent poem, this line is rich as chocolate
I have never been in "the bar scene" yet you took me into it and also into the rich milkiness of this encounter.
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Love at first sight, such a concept, if only. Ever found it? It would be nice. Loves Muse, chocolate voice. good images.
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Anticipation now as to what happens next. Very well written, flows along so easily and tells such an exciting event in one's life. Kep writing.
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ya know .. you already won gold.. what more do you need?? here.. I must say, this tickled me . . and I loved it to pieces.. (wicked grin) Just the picture and I ..... sigh! (sigh)
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hey wow this is excellent. very very good. keep up the good work.
Michelle -
wow what a fantastic poem gave me tingles up and down my spine, congratulations!
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Wow dad that is a very very beautiful poem. Maybe one day I will find love like that. Only in movies I guess. It's been awhile since we have talked...msn hasn't been working well for awhile, keeps booting me out, hopefully it will be fixed soon. How was your trip? Hope to talk to you very soon.
love you lots,
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Dad, excellent poem and wow very sensual great job:-)
Sherry
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I have to agree with Pattyann, this is perfect exactly the way it is. Your poems always have such sweet emotions, and breathtaking stories to tell. As always your rhyme is perfect, great write Paul
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Whew! Makes you catch your breath! I quite liked this piece. It brings out those breathtaking emotions in an excellent fashion!! It isn't erotic, but it's completely sensual. Great job here. God bless and keep writing.
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Paul, this is breathtaking! I certainly hope you don't "chip away" anything. It's superb as it is. Hugs, Patricia
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so theres that chocolate!! very nice beginning stanza and that lastline i like a lot! moist lips meet makes my lips moist lol...i love the way it sounds for some odd reason... any whooo... lovely poem... full of yearn and anticipation of the first kiss. Bravo dad!
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WOW Grampa... This is a very well written poem... It is very sweet... I really like this one... You did a great job... Very beautiful...
Hugs,
Beth
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Congratulations, this is a very fine, well-crafted and moving poem.
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thank you for entering .. this is.. well, we'll see won't we (Judge Judy)
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