I open my eyes to life – rushing back to assault me
the winds are pleasing to the storm – taking the path it takes lately
everyday realities – less harsh as the dream lingers.
Author notes
The sijo form – haiku's cousin – originated in Korea with the old songs of the Sylla empire (668-936) and the prose songs of the Koryo kingdom (918-1392). Near the end of the latter era, sijo came into its own, becoming Korea's most beloved poetry form.
Traditionally, the sijo consists of three lines of 14-16 syllables each with a total of 44 to 46 syllables per poem. A natural pause occurs midway in each line, each half line consisting of 6 to 9 syllables.
by Elieabeth St Jacques
Written August 22nd, 2005
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very good
I think I like this one cause it talks to me nice one.
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thanks lencio for looking in...larry
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This is a wonderful form, which I must try. thanks for the notes in the A. Comments. Haiku's cousin?lol!!!
Beautiful written, I feel it is much harder than Haiku, but I think I should try one!
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Nicely Done!!!!! Very discriptive in such a short period, lovely!
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thank you september for these great comments...larry
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wow this is a great piece of work describing the reality that we face each day but the dreams that we still hold on to i like the form you used never heard of it b4 thanks for entering
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thank you poet friend for commenting on my work...will look in on you...larry
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wow great fan you got going on here poet.....I would love to have loyal friends to applause my writings
......very nice writing...although sylables are not important as much as the intent of the writers emotions and feelings be felt...people seem to think fancy words are poetry....my thoughts are simplicity is the essense of words spoken....the end results are..no matter the form....what is expressed and felt by the reader is what makes poetry so beautiful...you did very well with this...I love it...
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thanks rosebud for your great comments...larry
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excellent
...as the dream lingers//
what an ending.. it 's very well written, you really did preserve the emotion in such a short write... smartly written.. -
thanks again poet for this great review...I will be looking in on you soon...a poet friend...larry
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I'm amazed at how simple your poetry appears to be, yet it hold a hiher meaning and impact. This takes a greater gift when it comes to writing good poetry, this my friend... you have within.
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thank you anna my friend...I think I'm going to like this form...your poet friend...larry
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A great write again poet. But what could we expect else
Also thank for the information on a sijo. I had never ever heard of that form. See, you'll never too old to learn new things. 
Anna.
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hello em...thanks for the great comments...this is a good form...have fun with it...a poet friend...larry
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thank you bobby for looking in on me..syllable count and flow is important...the poet should not lose sight of three basic parts that make a sijo unique...stucture...a musical flow to the reader...and the twist...have fun with this form bobby...nature...human nature...humor...bring it all...a poet friend...larry
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thank you poet for looking in on me...I also love your choice in word use and your work...and will be reading more of your work...a poet friend...larry
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thank you lily my dear friend..you always make my day...see you soon my friend...larry
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bobby asks a great question .... i really like this piece poet .... i love the emotional aspect and how the first thought feeds into the last one .... "i open my eyes to life ..... ..... less harsh as the dream lingers" ... and all that ties it together in between ... and as for a new form to learn ... yay ! .... seems haiku has a lot of offshoots ? ... >>> EM
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very good sijo
an excellent sijo i believe. i like the breaks or pauses in this piece. very well written. does this have restrictions about emotions or kigo? or is the syllable count and flow most important? lol, the more iread this the better i like this. very well done!!!
bobby -
I really like this. You did very well. Thanks so much for posting the information for us. I have read about this form in some readings which SirPort had suggested to me. I have yet to try this form...but you have inspired me to do so very soon..perhaps. Keep up the nice work....I will not be a stranger to your works.
LIZ -
You never, ever cease to amaze, with excellence in form and beauty. Such style and grace you exhibit in your works and the art you display with them always compliment to well! Bravo, Poet!
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thank you for looking in...larry
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keep it up nice and short
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