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last breath

I’m Human, simply Human
Limited by my shallow talent
I can see through it all
Standing like an empty glass house
Waiting for the stone to penetrate my weak walls

Can't take another breath
The air is poison and everyone around me
Stands taller,
Suffocating and intoxicating

My last breath
Pure pain as my chest burns
I swallow my pride
Clog up my insides even more
My body swells like a bloated
Corpse in the desert sun

Please cure me, and give me more air
I must learn to breath

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Written August 22nd, 2005

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  • midnight dreamer.
    September 11, 2005
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    Very...Sufficating...Not in a mean way, but you run out of air if you read it all at the same time...It's awsome to have that power over people...I love it...Keep it up...

    Bunches of Love and Happiness
    Ashley/et

  • cheaper than you
    August 22, 2005
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    its very good and i get it i just dont get why you feel that way im not saying your not cabable of that or anything but a ya