Tell me, did you ever wish on a shooting star?
To be with the one who is now so far
And did you ever cry for the girl who
Has always adored and loved you, only you
Who wanted you with a heart so pure and true?
But couldn’t say the simple words "I love you"
Tell me, do you ever wander astray in the night
Thinking about someone, now beyond sight
Looking towards the moon for any clue
That I'm out there, thinking of you too
Knowing that I am also wandering somewhere
And do you still miss me too, while you are,
Searching for your lost self out there?
~*~
Author notes
Written August 22nd, 2005
A contest entry
- Pre-writes & Fresh Writes Welcome Here! by LadyUnique.
300 points, ended January 17, 2008, 65 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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my favourite
i can jus keep on reading it forever.
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Nice,
I like how you take the reader here on a ride upon the wings of thought as you jot your ponderings down upon this beautiful background that sparkles like the words you grace us with upon this poetic stage. Peace, and another wonderfully penned piece tiny!
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~ x
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what a lovely read to find on a pillow or maybe a table, I think you could break a lot of hearts with writing like this. Wow, I'm impressed.
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Purely amazing! Still got a lot of talent I see,fantastic write,well done : ) love It!
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Oh that's very, very good. The rhyme is so good and not forced, which is great! Love it really!
Keep writing
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such sadness and longing in your words wrapped in a pleasing rhyme
thank you for entering and good luck
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the emotion in this poem is amazing! to be missing love is a feeling that words can not describe, it is so painfull and i can relate to what you are sayin. anyway good write and i hope to see more from you soon xx
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missing love.....
tmiss love for long is very sorrowful. Thoughts of love make us restless and we lose ourselves and wander in vacume. Love is a magic. It remains with us while together and also when away from each other.
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This poem is awesome! Nothing seems forced, it flows really well.
Loved it.
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this is awesome! oh how excellent. i really liked this alot, it is thought provoking, and the way it flows and rhymes, just so excellent! "thinking about someone....I'm out there, thinking of you too" that is the best part. that should get every reader. bravo to you!
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oh and yes i have wished on the shooting stars... never did my wish come true .... i hope urs will!
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Hi sweety,
ah! this is a very sweet poem ... I loved the first line very much... I dont believe in shooting stars wishing... but yeah I love them too much... love is a very beautiful feeling but it has pain associated with it... love and pain go hand in hand.... you've written it very beautifully dear...
May god gives you all the happiness and all the luv...
s
Neha -
My goodness, ‘lonely,’ you have words and phrases to share with beautiful thoughtful expression. You are a mesmeriser of people who paints with words; your ‘tentacles’ can reach out touching all who pass this way, changed forever. Thank you.
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This is beautiful! I have realized how much I missed reading your poems, you were always such a beautiful writer! I hope all is well in your world! Please, respond back and tell me how you are....
Megan -
nice poem Lonely, its really good, i liked it very very very very much, nice one, i hope to see more great poetry from you,
traz
-Crazy-Poet-4-Eva-
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thank you so much Katie!
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myspace.com/bonniemckee
It usually starts playing right when the page loads (depending on how fast your computer is). I love this song right now, especially since I'm so lonely in the relationship I'm in right now. 
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This is the beauty of poetry for that we can open our heart and let the true thoughts dribble out... this is beautifully written... whoever this is written for must be very lucky to be the resident of your heart... as always this is another lovely poem by you... keep on penning and sharing...
mina -
I think katie, you should send me the link right now
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Oh, I miss you bundles!! *smoothers you in kisses*
Just kidding! Anyway, this was a wonderful write! I know I've felt like this many times... have you heard the song "Somebody" by Bonnie McKee? It's my most favorite song of all time, and if you want, I can send you a link where you can listen to it for free. Your poem reminded me a lot of it.
Beautiful. Keep up the good work!
Kate
Edited on Aug 22, 6:21 p.m. because 'reminder to self: Fire secretary'. -
I have had this same question swirling in my mind for quite some time now. I still wonder if the person who last left me sitting in the dust really cared as much for me, if he perhaps misses my presence at all or what. I can't say I don't relate to this poem...it is one of the most emotionally fitting you have written, so far. I think just about everyone has gone through this cycle at least once in their lives, and many will see it several times around. I hope that this person, who and wherever he may be, realizes just how good it feels to be admired by one--and come running back to you with open arms.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora ("Mama")
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