As I fall on bended knees,
with no more to give, and no one to please,
I notice a mirror, one shattered no less,
A soul now distorted, among broken glass
A faded reflection, stares back at me,
And I try to envision, just who this could be,
She is all that I need, yet all I abuse,
She is all I neglect and all I refuse
Yet as I look a little closer, I can see she has my eyes,
And through my cloud of teardrops, it is she that I despise
She is someone that I cannot find anymore,
She is weeping and crying, all alone on the floor,
She is weak and pathetic, a disgrace, a disgust,
She is someone that I can just never trust
She is not the same person, she has no more smile,
She has no ambition, she's been gone for a while,
She is not anyone, she is nothing to me,
This girl is pathetic, yet this girl is me
If I could I would, pick this girl off the floor,
And tell her that she doesn't, have to hurt anymore,
I'd tell her she's beautiful,and that she is blessed,
I'd tell her that she is so unlike the rest
I'd tell her that her skin, resembles caramel glaze,
That reflects her deep amber eyes, that so many have praised,
I'd ask her to recite, all her fears and her thoughts,
And tell me the stories of battles she's fought
I'd ask her the secrets, to her hidden dreams
As she recaptures her beauty; so fragile it seems,
I'd just like to tell her, how strong she's become,
And that this is one battle; she has already won...
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Written August 22nd, 2005
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Holy Crap!
Hello Angel,
I got here off of Paula's page to start with. I had never read this one before and when I did...well I don't think that I could put it any better then she did. My God this is good! You, as Paula said, have laid yourself bare for the world to see, and yet you have spoken for so many others - including me. A wonderful - wonderful write. I doff my cap to you M'Lady.
Respectfully,
Eyec
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This is one of the most open and honest poems I think I've ever had the pleasure to read, truly fantastic, you have soo much talent.
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that is really good i loved it your good
but anyways good luck with the contest i bet your gonna win see ya later
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Yes - there is definitely something to be said about "The Power Of Love" -- I wouldn't be putting myself through this if I didn't think the ending would truly be a "happy one" --thanks for all your support through the last year and a half - I go back and read your comments all the time and they make me feel so good!!!!
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It's not only amazing, it's wonderful news, sugar! I'm so very glad to know that you're still together! I always believed, in my heart of hearts, that you'd make it; there's too much passion and deep love between you to ever be put out! You're love has always been an inspiration to those of us who have "followed" your story; you've made us believe that, in spite of what seems like insurmountable ojbects, love can conquor all! As always, I wish you great happiness, and nothing but the best that life can offer you!
Paula -
How nice it is to hear from you again, me lady...the revised version shows my inner struggle between my strength and my weakness - as far as what has been going on in my life - me and Jimmy ARE actually still together - amazing isn't it? I know my writings show different - but it is my therapy. Always has been. It has been a long road together but we will not let this journey end - we are currently in couple's therapy and so far it has made a world of difference for us both. We just have to learn how to deal with our own issues and stop trying to fight each others battles. We BOTH have issues and are willing to FINALLY deal with them. He has stated an AMAZING new job after being laid off for 8 months and hasn't had time to write like me. We also set our wedding date for Sept 9, 2006 on the beach. So - you should be seeing alot more of this journey through my poetry in the coming months. I am so glad that my poem could touch you as it had. Your comments have always meantso much to me. You truly touch my heart with every word ...
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Jazz, I couldn't shake this poem from my thoughts, and when I came back, I see that you've revised it! And I'm sooooo glad you did, girl! Those two newest verses reveal a much truer picture of the real you! This is simply beautiful, Jazzie, and now, most inspiring!
Paula
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My precious friend, I want to first thank you, from the bottom of my heart, for making yourself so open, and vulnerable, and having the courage to lay yourself bare before us. I don't know what to say to this beautiful and so very moving piece, Jazz! The only thing I can really say is that while this may be the reflection that you see, I also see myself....much too clearly. This was a really difficult piece to read for two reasons; one, is because I'm sure you know that the people around you don't see you this way, and it hurts me to think that you see yourself this way, but then, that's the other reason that I found this so difficult to read....you've captured, far better than I could ever have put into words, the way I see myself! This was like looking at my own reflection! The last two lines of the 4th verse are very adequate descriptions of myself. It was quite uncomfortable to read to that point, but when I got to the line "She is not anyone and she is nothing to me," my heart was in my throat! I wonder, girl, how many others of us look in the mirror, and see the same thing! Thank you, my precious friend, for what I know had to be a difficult thing to write! I only wish I could take your pain, so that you'd be able to see what the rest of us see when we look at you.....a beautiful, talented, warm and caring woman! Much love to you, my dear friend!
Paula
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