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Broken Wings~

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Blackbird (acoustic)- The Beatles.



Broken pieces fall like emotions
As she looks through the windows of you
Memories mixed with future potions
Not knowing if she can trust anew

She speaks of love, tenderly pure
But lays within her room all alone
Thinking on how much she does endure
Left with sadness to deal on her own

Breaking, shattered, broken too
What do you expect from her soul weak?
As she longs to mend, never you
Will caress the hands of beauty's treat

I love the way she sways every day
And her broken wings now soar freely
If you were mine, I'd clear clouds gray
And I'd love you for eternity

-poeticweaver
-angeleyes711






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Written August 21st, 2005

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  • Sharon Corr gold member
    October 20, 2008
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    AWE

    I'm in awe at what we do
    Forever, I shall sing,
    Love me do!

    Namaste Blessed Be, Love Sharon


  • poetryrocksmysox
    February 1, 2006
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    Very wonderful work, you two always do!


  • Dspiritsong gold member
    December 2, 2005
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    Excellent

    Wow...again a beautiful co-write... a beautiful poem that will sing in my memory tonight... I love your backgrounds and images, I don't know how you do them but they are fabulous. Dee

  • Mickie27
    August 30, 2005
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    This write is so free from your spirit. I can tell that this is from deep within your soul as your spirit soars on the page. The background you have chosen compliments this poem perfectly. All the love poured out on the page is wonderful you have such a wonderful way of expressing yourself. I am always in admiration of your beautiful stylish writing that is free and natural. This is full of powerful creation that flows from the poem and into the readers heart. It is just such an awesome poet my dear friend.


  • melphleg gold member
    August 24, 2005
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    What a beautiful picture of healing love. What a gift to heal the broken wings of someone with love so they can soar.
    Again I'm amazed that two people wrote this.


  • Idealizing Me Away
    August 22, 2005
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    Wow..This was so beautiful...Everything about it...


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    August 22, 2005
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    Well done inspiration from the FAB four who’s poetry is ageless this collaboration sores on the back of birds floating freely taking us along on this timeless flight.
    Very uplifting
    Paul


  • rite
    August 22, 2005
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    A song composed by a heart that has been to place and times few others have visited. The depth and intensity of the words are striking, especially since I am able to imagine the voice whispering them. Oh these retched dimensions! They allow us to do so much, but deny us to do even more. Living between worlds while being present in this one is at times extremely difficult, but here and now is what we have to deal with, where we have to live and love or refrain from that. Being aware of the existence of other places and times is both a blessing and a curse. But we know we have to take the good and live accordingly, patiently waiting until these are over, doing what we have to do for ourselves and others. The words in this magnificent poem have all landed in a heart similarly tuned. I stand in awe of your talent and grace. Take care, precious soul,

    Chris


  • Musimwa
    August 22, 2005
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    very good

    i like the imagery. keep it up. yur poem is very good.


  • UrbanGothicVamp
    August 21, 2005
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    wow, I loved it. I take your a fan of the beatles a great band by the way. great poem expressing love.


  • Court Jester
    August 21, 2005
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    you used good description and emotion in this poem. good job and keep up the good work!
    court jester

  • Molly Densmore silver member
    August 21, 2005
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    This is really good, it is sad, but then yet hopeful. You have written this well and with great expression of feeling. I really liked this and enjoyed reading it. Thanks so much for sharing it.


  • transcendental baby gold member
    August 21, 2005
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    This is beautiful ... you guys did a wonderful job on the movement from points of view ... watching not a participant? But the line What do you expect from her soul weak? doesn't seem to make sense ... or at least to me ... was it a typo or am I missing it's meaning? Great poem

  • mbckg3
    August 21, 2005
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    awesome!

    This is beautiful!! The words... they just seem like they are flowing from your heart!! I love it!!! I wish i had some applauses left because you definately deserve one!!!! Thanks so much!! Keep it up!

  • Art of Ignorance
    August 21, 2005
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    This is wonderful.

    She speaks of love, tenderly pure
    But lays within her room all alone

    Especially those lines. I think everyone thinks love is great, but the pain we endure sometimes ruins us.

    I loved this write. Good job, keep it up


  • Piston gold member
    August 21, 2005
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    Amazingly beautiful, Sharron! You are a gift from God!

  • kikibaby
    August 21, 2005
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    exactly what this is reminding me of. You wrote this beautifully!!! Just amazing...

    ♥ KIKI ♥


  • Black Raevyn
    August 21, 2005
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    Awesome

    This is so beautiful. It is so descriptive in emotion, and it is very well put. My favorite part is the second stanza.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 21, 2005
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    Beautiful!

    This piece speaks to me, as i scroll down from this page...About a woman who knows of love, but goes without since yesterdays..she's alone, but holds the keys, to sweet love and destiny..If only she knew, beyond the blue, I soar beside her freely... I love this lyrical poem, thanks for sharing your inspiration with me, love me do, as I love you...And we shall pen again my friend...The way to lovers do!

    Much love sweet angel!
    -Timothy The Poetic Weaver~


  • Deprived-of-Reason
    August 21, 2005
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    A very sweet poem. I liked the imagry it created for me. Well written and beautiful read!


  • UnchartedPoet
    August 21, 2005
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    A very sweet and inspired write of love.....i like the play of words discribing what would be done for love in same discription of a bird downed, mended and to fly again.....good job, well written.....enjoyed very much....thanks for sharing.

    TUI


  • August 21, 2005
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    You really did a fantastic job with this inspiration excellent.


  • guardian angel 1416
    August 21, 2005
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    Such a wonderful observation and resolution

    Very nicely written. I loved several aspect here.
    She speaks of love, tenderly pure
    But lays within her room all alone - What a powerful observation. I think i know this person., but at the same time you move to help clear the pathways for her succeed!
    Very,very well done! Impressive!
    Thank you!
    Sammy


  • August 21, 2005
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    AWESOME!

    Oh my gosh. This is soooo beautiful. It is absolutely stunning! Bravo! Bravo! standing ovation!!!!!!


  • StarvingAuthor
    August 21, 2005
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    Wow! that's so beautiful!!! very romantic and sweet. if i had any applauses left, i would most definitely use one on this poem! *applause*

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