So young with dreams
Of growing old
Sadly, the facts of life
He was never told
One too many parties
One too many beers
Too much sex
And now so many tears
One too many partners
To satisfy his lust
Slowly now,
His body turns to dust
His head hangs low
Trying to hide his shame
But now he knows
He has no one to blame
Each day
Growing more weak
Still not finding
The love he seeks
At age 23
He is laid to rest
Without ever completing
His life's true quest
Author notes
In loving memory of my only brother Michael. He past away on April 24, 1993 from Aids leaving a hole in my heart. Twelve years later I am still morning his death.
Option #8
Written August 21st, 2005
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The poem makes you realise the heash reality of the world. I am very sorry for your loss but as time goes on so must you. thank you for entering the contest and I wish you all the best.
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That was such a beautiful tribute to your brother. AIDS is taking so many more lives now, and it's a scary thought. Though they may be gone, they're never forgotten. That's why it still hurts years after someone passes. I'm still grieving over my great grandfather I lost 13 years ago.
Best of wishes
Tiffany -
well done!
The sad reality of this piece warrants naught but the reader's sincere sympathy. I'm sure it must have been a difficult experience for you, and probably still is. I've lost someone to AIDS as well, not nearly as close, but close enough to be a witness to the painstaking course of the horror. No one truly knows it unless he\she has either experienced it or watched it happen to a loved one.
You expressed this story very emotionally, but artistically as well. Great job, and best wishes in the contest!
Stacy
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wow, that would be such a hard thing to deal with...your emotions were truely expressed very very well here...this was so incredibly sad, but it was really good. Keep up the good work, and thanks for entering my contest!
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Well writen but it said nothing of how you felt while loosing him. Thanks for entering.
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A very sad poem and I'm sorry for your loss.I think you expressed this well and with vivid imagery.Thank you for entering and good luck ~Natari
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A very heart griping write,,
and full of truths and realitys
perhaps for someone who reads this write
they will stop and think and change their course of life,
Best of luck in the contest
FrozenTears -
wonderful
absolutely amazing. i'm so sorry for your loss. i can't possibly fathom what you have gone through and what you still go through. i know it's a horrific disease, and i pray that a cure will soon be found. great poetry! -
Wow! I'm almost speechless for words. This was a great poem. You express how so many people feel and what so many people are going through. Good job.
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This is a truly beautiful write. My cousin died from AIDS 10 years ago, I was too young to understand what was going on or what caused such heart felt grief. I'm so sorry for your loss.
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Hey. This is a very good poem. Nice work. Good Luck!
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A truly beautiful write, sorry for your loss..
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I like the fact that you held the flow so well...Nice quatrains...an emotional/confused backdrop that your poetry dispenses is good!
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Superb !!
this is truly Beautiful ...i may not be able to empathize..But i pay you my deepest Condolences....AND THIS IS TRULY BRILLIANT *STANDS UP AND APPLAUDS*
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wow. that was wonderful. i think that that was amazing, really. im so sorry about your loss, it must be hard to go through that pain.
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