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my star

the darkness has left its mark
but my times have come and gone to be dark
i have arisen a new no longer with a forlorn grudge
but no matter who i forgive in the shit of life i trudge
i have found the love lost
but this time ti didn't come at a cost
and the ring from my lip shall be the ring
in that circle of life love i shall eternally bring
for ever and always was all that i can give
who woulda thought me a life left to live
she is from the past of a lost love
but this time no talk of a slaughtered dove
the white was resurrected unstained
this love is some thing i want to obtain

back from the dead with a clear head full of dreams
and a new plan of no more plot less schemes
dressed in full black like the night i was born into
the same vowels stick like a glue
stuck to the heart of a child of the darkness
to try to find his night of bliss
i have forever to find always
but i found it in the old days
she was one who left me under the dirt to rot
and i stayed boiling, building, in that very spot
but the dirt was drudged from the six foot deep resting space
and i found my love with the means covered with lace
the seductive beauty to walk hand and hand with with the moon on our faces
she keep me safe in the safest of places
right by her side is the best place to be
how in the past i could not see
i thought i did wrong with the death of my heart
but it was meant to be from the start

she knew what was to come and what will be
the stars of the night she would see
both born of the night to reach one goal
no matter even if we both took a toll
we had to go threw allot to see the truth
or else it would to obtuse
my shooting star of fire
she keep me safe my needs were never dire
because i was by my stars side
she keep my grave safe while i could hide
and find the truth that she resurrect
and then she could see the things i had to correct
i love you my shinning star
and i knew now you will never be far

Author notes

idk what to say i love this girl
Written August 21st, 2005

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  • fathom me
    August 26, 2005
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    Hi D
    Happy to know you're happy
    Love
    kunjal.


  • aboycalledtrevor
    August 21, 2005
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    to me this poem could be a song. a sad rock song. like emo. but maybe thats just me...i love emo music. but anyway, this was a great poem, i really enjoyed it and it packs a strong message hidden between the lines for each reader. the only thing i could suggest would be to capitalize the first letter of each line...it just makes the poem look more professional (in my opinion) again, great job

    trevor