mist and memories
sweet fragrances linger
in the garden~
Author notes
Poems I commented on were
Mysterious Lover & Goodbye Forever
In the contest I commented on
Silver Wings by Fallen Angel Fern
Rapid Wings by Charishma
Written August 20th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku by tearrsofthemoon.
309 points, ended September 7, 2005, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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lovely
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This poem is excellent, especially the second line
Sweet fragrances linger
It resonated in my mind for a while after I read it. Excellent job!
~M~
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Oh wow! Your picture, combined with the words created a whole world in my mind. You really did capture the feeling of a serene garden!
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this was a truly beautiful write with such vivid colour! i loved thuis well done honey
thanksw for commenting on my work
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ahh you can almost smell the flowers in this piece and the summer air. I love not only the visual but how this stimulates the readers mind. beautifully done.
huggles
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What a beautiful picture! I just read Amunet's dedication inspired by this haiku, and I can definetly see why she was inspired. This piece is quite outstanding. I can never figure out how people manage to say so much in so few words. I really love this!
Good luck in the contest as well!
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I posted the above and titled it "A Wistful thought for Susan" hope you like it hun. allpoetry.com/poem/1471305 just felt like hugging ya and that's as close as I can get
Edited on Aug 24, 7:11 p.m. because ''. -
"She walks through fragrant air
upon wings of silken mist
reliving life in petaled hues
beneath sunshine's bliss
and as she starts to dance
winds teasing ribbons in her hair
she smiles the brightest smile
as down her cheek slips a lonely tear"
The image your poem conjured in my head. I dedicate it to you and shall call is "Susan's Wisps" How's that? It took my breath and I could not help to smile and giggle just a hint, like a school girl as the fragrance gripped me. This is stunning Susan! Short, powerful and stunning! Blessings, Gypsy
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Hehe! I entered that same contest!
I really love this though. Haiku is so beautiful when written well, as you have done! It is something that can have a simple meaning and yet so many meanings. The picture really compliments the poem as well.
Great job and thanks for sharing this.
~Sarah
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Dear Molly,
This is just SOOO beautifully expressed and your picture is delightful. Hope you are going along OK.
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh. -
Great, Blushy. ... as always.
Sag -
Thoroughly enjoyed. Darmok
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wow beautiful poem it is a great hiku
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This was beautifully done - there is a subtle allure in the unknowing.
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...and now i've had a stroll through the garden
without even leaving my room
beautiful sis
your words transport your readers
into a more beautiful world
will go to work with a smile on my face this day
because of your talent and the serenity your words instill.
love you,
~liz -
Sweet, simple and profound haiku.
Good work!
Cheers
JP -
I really like the first two lines. The third lacks punch - too simplistic. My opinion. Others will disagree, I'm sure.
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Very nice! A pleasure to read!
I have read that the memory of a fragrance stays with us the longest. That has been true for me..it's always a very pleasant experience... (same as reading your poems).
Love ya, Sis!
♥ Maureen
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Susan
I love this haiku
I hope all is well for you
Love ya
Karen
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THis is a beautiful haiku Susan, you have such a talent for them, the picture is manificent, I raelly feel I can smell the fragrance of them. Love it and love you.
Hugs Joan
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Lovely Imagery
Oh this is lovely. How very pretty. There is something so special about the garden and growing things as you have so elegatly said right here.
Well done. ~Pam
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Very beautiful, I love the picture
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Great Job
This is beautiful Susan, as always you make the beauty of all things even more gorgeous I wish you the very best on this contest, I hope you win a trophy... ... No doubt you have showed your talent and gift right here, and I have noticed that its within your pieces that shows just how radiant you truly are ... Good Job! Sara 
P.S I got your IM... did you get to the ER? Are you okay? Keep me updated. I love you big sis and I got your card & letter today... will reply and mail you a letter Monday, first thing! -
Very delicate haiku. I am not experienced in this form but yours is very pretty. Thanks for sharing and for reading. Good luck in the contest.
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beautiful
Just what I needed to brighten up a blah day LOL This is beautiful Susan and the image is PERFECT!!!!
many (((((((((((((hugs)))))))))))))) to you
`Kathy -
This is utterly utterly beautiful and made me pause to absorb it's meaning. I almost smelt the fragrance of the garden. Each word in it is right, perfect.
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A beautiful haiku, Susan I happen to love them and was not aware of this contest. I hope to enter, not so much to win, though that would be nice, but I like the idea of being among other haiku's, especially when they're as lovely as this one.
Good luck in the contest
Luv and
Dee
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This is lovely...Susan. You did well in capturing the essence of this lovely picture and the essence of a beautiful garden.
Good work..and good luck.
Liz -
A scent that brings back a memory...that's what this made me think of. Very sweet and softly written hon. Well done with this. Good luck in the contest.
~Lyrical
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This was very lovely and very descriptive of a garden in very few words. I love haiku's they always remind me of nature especially yours. Excellent write!
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Yes its beautifuly written Susan lovely wondeful job!
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i'm not a haiku fan,but if they all complimented nature the way your has,i would love them as i love yours.the mist and memories does it for me.i can smell the flowers as the memories float into my head.yes,this is a great haiku.
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