A journey high above black eyed clouds
Shining, shimmering, and glimmering above statued crowds
This metal creatures cabin cold and cramped
Soft whispers, quiet murmurs, deafen chatters.
A black night outside my 8 by 5 window
Clouds covering cities like a torn cotton pillow
Flyers read endlessly and my pen stops and then again it goes
Finally, lights light the sky in uneven flows
"It's almost as if God has a flash light
in this blinding darkness."
Lightning, rumble, raised awareness at the skies beauty
And my gentle neighbor looks on in awe with a name of Judy.
Even with all the bumps, nudges, and tumbles in the sky
I gave a gentle prayer I wouldn't fall from this mechanic high
"It does, if only for a moment he shows us his terrifying grace."
Author notes
I know this is hard to follow, I was on a plane at night and went by a small lighting storm. It looks amazing up there next to them.
Again, this is for a class. The Theory of Rhyme
Written August 20th, 2005
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Awww.. Leanna, another unique poem from your pen. I often wonder at your imagination and inspiration, wonder in awe
Your poem made me feel as if I were watching this show of natures power and beauty.
Here I go again, though.... pointing out a couple of little typos or errors:
Line two of the first stanza....shinning should be shining and you don't need the apostrophe in statued
Further down in the poem, third four line stanza...Lighting should be Lightning
Third line, same verse.... nudgs should be nudges
and I'm not sure if in the last line of that verse, mechanic perhaps should be mechanical??
You are SOOO good, Leanna...I do love your poetry
Big
and much love
Grandma
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