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You ment the world to me
I could have died for you
You could have been the killer
Yet your heart was bound to another
Of which I wasnt aquainted with
I gave my all, My every breath to u
At night i cried cause u didnt see
That I was there waitng for you
Waiting for you to open your blind eyes
Acknowledge me to be more
But somehow all I ever ment you
Was nothing more than a close friend

Author notes

just some thoughts I had lol its fine now though lol
Written August 20th, 2005

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  • Embitter
    May 26, 2007
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    Nice, short and free verse-y.. I liked it though.. not so new.. = P


  • LostShadow
    May 24, 2007

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    Very nicely written with good flow, sad with lots of emotion.

    Very nicely done.

    Keep up the great writting

    Em


  • QueenWolf
    May 20, 2007

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    Very well written mate, i loves the flow of it keep up the good work.

    ~Queen~


  • FallenAngel1990
    November 30, 2006
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    you never know when you will find love in this life


  • FallenAngel1990
    September 21, 2006
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    i love you


  • GrandmothersAngel
    August 10, 2006
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    You already have a lot of comments saying how wonderful this poem is, so I'll say something different. Use 'Spellcheck', you have a few commom spelling errors.


  • MidnightButterfly
    July 31, 2006
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    That touches i believe everyone whos felt like that before your poems really flow good job sounds corny i bet


  • Dragonia
    July 30, 2006
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    simplistic in unrequited love and yet hard to bear at the same time. a twisted web of love that can not be unraveled without the beholders eyes to open that of the blind. words are strong but actions are stonger. ~Dragonia~

  • FallenAngel1990
    June 8, 2006
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    i love you vince and you will always be there for me thats why i am marking my chest with your name i love you so much vince
    Edited on Sep 07, 5:57 p.m. because 'umm yeah'.


  • SakuraHaruno12
    March 3, 2006
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    hey, great job this is exceptional...... l love your style


  • Empathy-eyes
    October 24, 2005
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    Deep, emotive and beautifully sad. I read a few old comments you left me on my pages from months ago, just hope you're doing alright.

  • vampyricFusion
    October 9, 2005
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    meep

    wow...this is beautiful...like you...its so sad but so true...why is it life treats us like this? why is it that we can never find another to appreciate us as we should be. peace to you my friend. i hope to see you in the end

  • blueEYEScry
    September 26, 2005
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    i can totally relate, this is really well written, i liked it alot

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