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Mario

I thank you for being my brother.
I thank you for being my friend.
I thank you for deserting me,
just like my mother did.
I thank you for being so cold.
I thank you for being in my life.
I thank you for everything.
I thank you for hating me.
I thank you for leaving me,
and not believing in me.
I looked up to you and wanted to be like you;
brave and not afraid of rage.
At least i thought you were these things
Until i realized you retreat with what life brings.
I loved you and i still do.
You're my brother and I'm your friend.
Who won't leave you like you did.
So thank you for being you.

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Written August 19th, 2005

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  • ShaShay
    September 25, 2005
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    Take another look at the next-to-the-last line.

    I like this. Good emotion shows in every line.