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The Rain

As the rain drenches my hair and rolls
Down my body I feel alive
The darkness in front of me is
All that i need to survive
I walk towards your window
With my blood thirsty smile
I will feed tonight
OH how peacfully you sleep
Not for long though
This will be the last night you ever sleep
You will sleep in the day
Hunt at night
You will be my king
And together we will make it
Forever dark

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Written August 19th, 2005

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  • Nigthmarish

    The voice in your poem sounds like Morheous trying to invade someone's sleep with a nightmare. This piece has an Edgar-Allan-Poe flair to it. Are you familiar with any of his poems?

  • gothic-chick
    December 26, 2005
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    awesome

    man this is really good...i like it alot..i like vampires too..


  • Zeal
    August 20, 2005
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    lol you can't bite a werewolf if your a vampire. its a bad idea. anyways love you bye.