I spent the years away from you, and you away from me
In places far and far away that you will never see
For you I've travelled all the earth that's underneath the sky
But I could never hope to reach the places more than high
I thought I'd find you there when death would reunite our love
For oft your eyes remind me of the heavens far above
Then I came home and I discovered that your love for me
Was nothing more than petty greed, to my own misery
I always think of blue eyes when I oft remember you
For love I've ever wanted is most radiant in their hue
I never thought to see behind the glimmer of your eyes
Else I'd have glimpsed the shadows in my visions of its skies.
I've chained my love within your own away from sorrow's cold
For I did trust the love that your blue eyes have always told
But now I find it buried in the graveyard of your heart
Along with all the love you never cherished from the start.
If forever was the time it took the light to leave
Then forever is the time before I'll ever grieve
I rue the day I placed my love forever in your keep
Behind blue eyes forever closed in deep eternal sleep.
Author notes
Blue eyes can be deceptively clear. They hide many things. They keep many things. And yet they are deceptively clear, and deceptively alluringly pure.
For the people who were mesmerized by blue eyes, to their uttermost regret.
Originally inspired by tearful-eyes' contest, "..Behind Blue Eyes.."
Written August 19th, 2005
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Thank you for saying you liked this. In truth, this wasn't a personal write. I've not encountered anybody with blue eyes in person yet. Mainly because I live in a place where people's eyes are predominantly brown. My friends do say I have black beady eyes though
, and I really think that eyes aren't all about color. It's more how the color reflects in the light. The shades, you might say. To a certain extent, I believe in the saying "the eyes are the windows to the soul", mainly because of what people say about my eyes. *shrug*
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I don't like blue eyes and maybe it is for the reasons you state in your comment. I find them cold and lacking in warmth. I prefer green and then brown. Blue is just a cold harsh color and you have vidicated my opinion in this write. Well done. You do have a few places that are a bit bumpy but then again this is a touchy subject so they lend a bit of truth.
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Thanks for stopping by to read this poem, and most especially for dropping this lovely comment in.
I'm glad you appreciated the poem, though I have to say it's nothing personal. I must confess that I wrote this solely as a contest-piece, and perhaps very probably I was just moved to write something bitter by mysterious forces. In truth, I've never seen blue eyes up-close yet.
Thanks for the lovely comment.
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I'm very glad it moved you. Tis quite bitter, isn't it? Thanks for the wonderful comment and the applause.
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stunning portrayal of the mind behind the blue eyes..touching to say the least and poignant to say the most..felt the same--Shubs
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Thanks.
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Hey, thanks. I'm not familiar with the song, and in truth, I wrote this for a contest of the same name, not so long ago.
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is great well done
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The title drew me in, as it is the same title as one of my favorite songs (by the who/ covered by Limp Biskit) and I wasn't disappointed once I read it. Very well done.
Bestest of wishes and all that other mushy, gushy stuff
~Meli~
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Thanks, luv.
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Congratulations!!!
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Thanks for the great comment.
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Wow. This poem is of a such high standard, so much emotion portreyed through your words, the rhyming is perfect, the flow is perfect...It's perfect!
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Hi there Kabayan,
This is so sad. But I am impressed with the tragic emotions portrayed in this piece, very well-expressed. The rhymes and flow are brilliant. I can say that this is indeed exceptional. I love to rhyme myself and I just learned to write in meter just lately. I am so impressed with this piece. Thanks for commenting on my poem. Truly appreciate it. Hugs, Eris
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