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Beautiful Me

Forced to be something I don't want to be
Stuck inside someone I can not stand
Unable to be whom I desire to be
Trapped in a shell which shouldn't be mine
A prison of carbon
A structure of water
A hell reserved for me alone
Uncomfortable and unwanted
Yet mine none the less
Its a shame that the world will never see
The beautiful me

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Written August 18th, 2005

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  • I Is Cat
    June 9, 2006
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    This is very powerful and really really good. You did an amazing job with expressing yourself.
    <3 Catherine

  • fiffa46
    June 9, 2006
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    Thank you for your kind words shzoosy. I am glad you enjoyed reading it.


  • starwing
    June 9, 2006
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    this is so sad...and yet you hold onto your dignity... very good.. i hope to see more good writes...peace and harmony..shzoosy


  • Mysteriouz
    September 29, 2005
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    wow. this is very powerful. i relate to this so well. it is really great. id applaued but i dont have enough points. sorry

  • GLightAngel
    September 17, 2005
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    But I already have! And you are a beautiful thing
    I wish you well always, a true friend indeed.

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