That Christmas morn, the snow came down
Like crystal tears of joy
Reminders of a shining heart
Abundantly employed
Forever giving joyously
To those in greatest need
Please tell him that I see his soul
Completely void of greed
Amidst the fears of tempest torn
In seas of sad regret
This ship prevails through turgid storm
And her journey continues yet
To carry him, the homeward bound
To harbors safe, serene
From whence the song of love resounds
And happiness is gleaned
Upon these decks his chains of life
Will scatter in the breeze
And free his heart to fly once more
To loving arms as these
Please tell him that a love was found
Within poetic grace
This bond we form is so profound
That none could take his place
So tell him when the tear drops fall
They fall on sacred ground
To nurture what grows in his heart
This love that we have found
Fore our poetry will ever live
And the world will always know
Of the precious gifts his heart does give
And tell him I love him so
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© P.M.Williams
Background by Strmdncr
Author notes
I wrote this after falling in love with a poem by my dearest friend Patrick (repomen79) "Tell Her" allpoetry.com/poem/124238
His words were so prefound that they touched me deeply. And since we are writing partners, I just had to write this piece. Thank you Patrick, for your sweet inspiration..... (((HUGS))) UPDATE: For those of you who didn't know Patrick, He passed away this past spring. I hope you will stop by his pages and enjoy some of his work. You will not be disapointed... And I know Patrick would be thrilled. He always loved to get comments...
Written January 4th, 2003
A contest entry
- Show me your best poem ever... by poet2angels.
325 points, ended April 2, 2006, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Magnificent
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Thank You
Ellis, thank you for taking the time to read my work. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Pat Williams
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Dear Pat, I've just re read Patric's "Tell her" so I came looking once more for your reply.
Both poems are truly wonderful and has sent me on a trip down memory lane.
Patric made such an impact on all our lives that will remain with us always.
I would like to see you writing again Pat because you are an amazing poet.
Love Joan
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Thank You
I truely wish I could write. I'm not sure why but my muse has gone to sleep and I fear she/he is taking far too long to wakeup... I thank you for remembering me and Patric. I hope our history poems make it into your project.
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Dear Pat, it seems a lot of us are losing our Muse lately, so many have told me the same thing, including my Muse. I wonder where they are going to? Maybe they are on a beautiful desert Island somewhere having a great holiday away from all of us, maybe we've worked them too hard? I will send an SOS out to your Muse as I'd love to see you writing again, she has had a long enough holiday.
I'll always remember you and Patric, I guess we'll always miss him no matter how many years go by.
Love to you my friend
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John, you are too sweet...
Hugs & laughter
Pat
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Rx: Write more of these
This was exactly the right contest for this piece, Pat.
(I kinda waylaid this link off your message to Izzi)
I could get lost in your things like I could get lost in an art museum! The security guard would have to kick me out!LOL
Lovely!
John
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Thank You so much for taking the time to comment. Patrick did love this poem. He even added to it in the comments...
Thanks again...
Pat -
oh, its so touching and heartfelt. beautiful writing. *nods* yes, i'm sure patrick would be proud. its so sweet. it's just lovely. brilliant work, best wishes
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This is so lovely! I am sure that Patrick would be so proud of you. The poem flows flawlessly and your story is touching...Good luck in the contest!...Lynda
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Oh my, this is just precious...such a sweet write, not just the choice of words, but the subject, feelings, everything. I loved this, you are very talented. I almost cryed on this one! -
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this is so sweet sad lovely and i will check out his page to really lovely write here great stuff xxxxxxxxx
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This is an amazing piece of poetry....cheers Jay -
FYI.... Patrick did read this. You can find several of his comments mixed in with the others...
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I thought this to be truely beautiful and deeply heartfelt.I am sure your friend would be deeply toched.I do remember.Seems we have lost a couple of great ones on here.I still think of Jean often.(Dittysri) Still go back and read all of his messages for me.So nice we still have that on here.
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These is a lot of sweetness and grave you work, also like you said I guess that is a lot emotion your freindship. O want to add this little part "Fore our poetry will ever live" just beacause I think most good tp great poems have lines in them set them apart from other and this was that part/
Image and Visions … Dare not only to dream, but do that of what others only dream of. -
great tribute to such a dear friend sypathy and prayers to his family and freinds thanks for sharing such a heart felt piece keep up the great work
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Pat you must really miss him.
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Thanks Red.... So glad you enjoyed it. Here is the link to Patricks poem "Tell Her" allpoetry.com/poem/124238
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This is absolutely beautiful Pat!! So much passion.
Red -
Thank you so much, Di... It is good to see you again and I'm so glad you get a chance to read this and Patricks work.
I too miss him and working together. He was such a fun person to work with. He left a huge hole in the world that I don't think will ever be filled.
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Pat, this gave me goosebumps, I sadly miss you and Patrick's writes and visit them every so often to remind myself of how two ppl can click in poetry's thoughts and combine such lovely visions and thoughts...k you made me cry remembering..
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I know in my heart of hearts, that some people are meant to cross our paths. They become such a part of our lives, a part of the fabric of who we are from that moment on. I can sense this is how it was with you and Patrick.
This is beautifully constructed, Pat, richly worded from the love you have for him and from the depth of your friendship.
Thank you for sharing.
Maddie -
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on my work. I am so glad you enjoyed this.
Regards
Pat -
Such an extraordinary flawless write. This has to carry great sentimental value for you. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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Thank you, Amber for your kind words. I am so glad you enjoyed this piece.
Regards
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wow this is amazing..I like this one a lot, i think you are very talented and i enjoy reading your work. I will be looking forward to more from you in the near future..never stop writing
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this was full of grace and poise... what an amazing writer you are... i chose this one to read first, mostly because of the him.. but now i feel i'm missing the other half.. so i'll go see Patricks.. beautifully written and full of heart...
subtle background very nice as well... soothing.
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this piece was very admirable and worth the trip to take to get to know someone who means the world to you-death is never an easy thing to cope with, yet when remembered like this, makes the feelings inside linger with warmth!
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This is a realy sweet and very moving piece. There is such emotion and such imagery here, and I really felt what you were saying, and that doesn't happen often with me. I'm sorry about your friend, but I'm sure he would be proud of this piece, its just so beautiful. Please keep writing, and don't change your style, its beautiful the way it is
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this was beautiful... i loved the imagery, description and flow of your emotions... thank you so much for sharing this with us... ill be for sure checking your friends writings out, that way to complete this one... cheers
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Thanks X 1,000,000
Dear Pat,
Turgid?(goes to the dictionary.....returns with lump still in throat)Oh, THAT turgid!LOL
Nice narrative Pat!
If you don't mind my saying....
When you write, and have Patrick in mind, your mind waxes totally poetic! A good thing!! People we love should, and do, inspire us to newer, better heights!
Love this poem, that's all!
John
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What a kind thing to say... I think it is the greatest feeling when a writer can move someone with their words... Thank you so much for stopping by. I am so glad you enjoyed it...
Hugs
Pat
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I am in awe of this piece. I am sitting here and I can't even think of how to express my feeling into words. This is simply amazing. This is truly a beautifully penned piece of poetry. Such exquisite beauty.
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You know I think I looked it up but I'm not sure now... I'll have to check again. LOL
Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving a comment...
Pat -
very nicely penned...a beautiful poem, lovely flow...
'A midst the fears of tempest torn'
im not sure if that should be one word or what...Amidst..i dont know...but...nice job with writing this..well worth the read
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Thank You Aliana... And thank you for reading Patricks poem as well. I'm sure he would have loved to read yoru comment..
Hugs
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Thank You Heart, I know the feeling, my partner passed away last spring so now I'm on my own... But he taught me a lot. I am a very lucky person indeed...
Thanks for stopping by...
Hugs
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read my work, so glad you enjoyed it
regards
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Awww this is very cute. I want to read the other poem now!
THis was lovely!!
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read my work...
Glad you enjoyed it..
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aww i want a writing partner now...this is a beautiful poem, made me think of all the navy men out there, on the sea right now. wonderful job...increadible the way it flew off my tongue.
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This is beautiful. I don't know what else to say, except that it's excellent work. Just everything about it appealed to me. Great write, you've got great talent.
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This is such a wonderful poem
It has touched me. It flowed wonderfully and it was just... yeah. Amazing. Awesome write
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Wonderful flow in this poem. It had such a melodious quality that I read it TWICE. lol. Not to mention that I enjoyed the content and simply your wonderful use of language in a rhyming poem. All too often I read rhyme that is trite, and this was anything but. Very nice.
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it's a beautiful poem.its full of emotions.sweet emotions.deep emotions.and i love the background, it made me realize i cant wait for the winter to comes!(okay okay i know when the winter will come i'll hate it...
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Thank you so much for this beautiful comment. This poem was written after reading "Tell Her" by Repomen79.
Patrick was my writing partner and the dearest of people. I don't know if you knew him but he passed away this past April. We have several collaborations listed on my front page, but if you'd like to see the one that inspired this check out;
allpoetry.com/poem/124238
Again Thank you for your kind words..
Pat -
I can't even think of words that are fitting for the praise I would like to lavish here on this amazing poem. This is so touching and so romantic... absolutely beautiful! Thank you for sharing this with me.
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Thank You so much for stopping by to read and comment on my work. I am so glad you enjoyed it..
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This is beautiful. Very sweet and heartfelt. I really enjoyed it.
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Wow... Thank you so much.
I'm so pleased you enjoyed this.
Again... thank you
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wonderful
This is quite amazing. It is one of the best I have read in quite a long time. If you don't mind, I will link to it on my home page.
Bravo.
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Gorgeous.
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This was a very beautiful read,
I loved the flow of it, readable! Nice work!
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This is beautiful never stop writing, Am I mistaken but did repomen79 pass away? I though I had read a column about his death, forgive me if I'm wrong but that ap name just came to mind, if so than this piece is just even more so beautiful & I thank you for sharing this piece. Wonderful Write ---Sara
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This is still everybit as beautiful as the first time i read it, Pat. It was a nice surprise to see it as one of Tina's selections for this week ...along with Patric's poem, 'Tell Her'
I miss you on allpoetry...wish you'd come back... to visit or to stay
Miss ya, girl
Love and {{{HUGS)))
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I have just finished reading Patrics out of Tina's week 11
the two of you do make an amazing team,I always enjoy Pats and I enjoyed this one also,they both blend in so well together,amazing reply to "Tell her* thank you for sharing it with us.
bless you
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A beautifully ispiring poem indeed. Both yours and Patrick's poems go together so well. Adding this to a future RR list so keep an eye out on the columns section.
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This is beautiful. I don't comment often but when I come across something as wonderful as this I just have to leave a few words...
Now I'll have to read Repomen79's poem....
Thank You for this lovely work...
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it is always best to tell on of the value they add to your life before they are subtracted from this world and he must truly adore this poem...Artis
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This is so amazingly beautiful ,it is so genuinely written that it just flows like music .
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wow this is wonderful, once again I am amazed at how good people can be at expressing their feelings into poetry...
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...so much complexity that reads so simply...a joy to read...a joy to hear such words fall so right...well and well done Pat...
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Brillant!
Amazing!
Wonderful!
Awsome!
This is geneis! This touched me so much.
And I agree with Asylum Princess this has a classic rythmn, and the emotions are elogant and timeless. If we still had verict deals I would put this in the "Don't touch it" cadagory.
Yes I know I can't spell. Check out some of my poems sometime.
Thanxies.
~Crystal
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This had such a beautiful sound in my mind as I was reading it. This poem has a classic rythmn! The flow of words...ideas...and emotions within this poem are truly elogant and timeless.
Much respect,
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may I echo with Wendy here?
it does read beautifuly Pat
rolls so elequantly past the lips as each word is mouthed
beautiful work
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The word looked into the mirror with Love.
Arent we most joyfuly the stuff of dreams?
The songs the thing, and when we bring,
our love into the song we sing.
Its getting to the point where we are going to do some serious writing. sweetheart. youre answering a poem writen to a women to one written to a man in a style exactly like mine, was both clever and very creative. I read this and it makes me proud of you we're gonna simplify how we write, But we WILL write us a bundle sweety.
I really think that in 35 yrs you'll be doing readings on colledge campus' at10 grand a pop and all the perks.
Ive seen youre poetry change and grow over the course of our collaberations.that you would like me as a poet enough to allow me to have this experiance with you is my fortune and my glory. -
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A really beautiful, honest and heartfelt write. I feel so priviledged to have read it. Thank you so much for sharing -
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this is so beautifully written it captures the emotion so precisely that u can totally relate to the poem nicely done and I wouldn’t change a thing on it -SilentPain -
don't touch it!
A pat answer///a pat on the back...a patty wagon cause it made me giddy....a pat-a-cake cause I'm hungry too...pat-ternity
which is his eternity....a pat of butter to make it smooth and a pat on your cheek for your kind poem this past noon...lovely work as usual...yours from the shell...Artis -
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This was so wonderful!! The flow...the words...your rhyme are all perfect...I loved this
Your beautiful words seem to be carefully chosen...this poem was hauntingly beautiful
Really beautiful work Pat...it is amazing :)
Hugs~~
Dawn -
don't touch it!
Pat this is so beautiful one of your best ive read.....flowed just like a song and from the heart this sings out in harmony the notes of love and unity of closeness from inside them.
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I love this. It's beautiful, soft, just beautiful!!!!! -
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Pat - this work is so peaceful and delightful to read - it fills the reader's heart with serene happiness for the love expressed. -
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The meter in this is brilliant! I read the entire piece out loud twice... there was only one line that didn't quite 'sound' like the others to me, or maybe it just broke the perfect flow.
'And her journey continues yet'
It's as if that line has one extra syllable compared to how the 2nd line of that stanza read. Does that make sense ?
I love this, its really beautiful work. That's my 2cents, spend as you wish :-)) -
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Thank you all for such lovely comments.. I'm thrilled you enjoyed this piece...
(((HUGS))) -
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Beautifully excellent. Love they way this sounded out loud.
Got a nice feel from this.
Thank you for sharing this.
Rodney -
don't touch it!
Pat, I could almost touch the tenderness in this well-structured poem. You and Patrick are by far my favorite collaborators ... except (naturally LOL) my own ;)
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ohhh Pat this was simply amazing it just made me melt inside and get all mushy, Imean this was simply a beautiful write, you know how much I love the sea and the Ocean in writing, I can feel this stuff being I have lived a considereble amount of time upon the sea, in lonelines and in love, wishing to be free, and well this is such a deeply sad nad profoundly hopeful write, seemingly contradictory, unless you look at how confusing an emotion love is, you made it so perfectly clear inthis, what love and sadness and hope werea ll like, and it was one of those writes that just leaves one realing inside, eloquent romantic and beautiful, jeeze wish I would have not got bootedofflinee yesterday in the middle of the read, but it was even better now being my present mental state, thank you for inviting me to read a write you surely knew would touch me especially, very beautiful,
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*remembers to breathe now* a stunning piece hon... had me captivated from the very first lines :o)
huge hugs,
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this was quite enchanting my friend
made me smile on this snowy night
:) (hug)
thanks for sharing
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Beautiful poem, Pat! Inspired and inspiring!
:-) Maureen -
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Bespeak a word and I am healed,
My gentle dreaming friend.
And all my sorrows are revealed,
As ashes in the wind.
My heart speaks far inside of me,
The Loves the only thing.
Thanks dear for the oppertunity,
To stand with you and sing. -
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You weave the magic in my mind with swirls profound - love, legend, lore - some lost and some found. Leaving me in this kaleidoscope of your mind. -
don't touch it!
Simply divine, Dear Pat ... No other could have phrased this so beautifully ... A treasure to read, a treasure to hold, a treasure to keep forever ...
HUGS
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very soulful and touching -
don't touch it!
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This is beautiful, it made me tearful just reading it. WOW I love this.
So tell him when the tear drops fall
They fall on sacred ground
To nurture what grows in his heart
This love that we have found
Fore our poetry will ever live
And the world will always know
Of the precious gifts his heart does give
And tell him I love him so
That is the most beautiful thing I have ever heard. -
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spirit to spirit, soul to soul the lighthouse on the shore-line does shine the beauty of love so divine...
Hugs to you both! -
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gorgeous, beautiful poem. (to many perfect comments, can't think of something original) -
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Have read both this piece and Patrick's and am taken aback by the friendship ties that have so strongly developed. Beautiful tribute Pat to one who would appear to be such a compassionate person. Bless you both. -tj- -
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Its beautiful. The love the passion. Awww..i want to feel like that. I want to be embraced with those words! I want to be able to feel such things as you described. Its makes flowers bloom and clouds float above. Thats how picture perfect this peice is! Its like the perfect spring day. Its gorgeous!! -
And thank you all for taking the time to read my work and leave such lovely comments... (((HUGS))) to you all
Pat -
Always my pleasure Patrick. I have found great joy in words through you and your inspiration.... Thank you for a gift I can never repay...
(((HUGS))) -
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WOW!!!
So very lovely and contains so much love that can't be 'touched' by human hands.
So sweet of you to offer this to him.
Lovely form, rhythm, and rhyme!!!
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