You
Walk away
Don't turn back
You useless you
You filthy you
With no dignity
Not for you
Disgusting you
You spiteful you
You who can lie
And not be touched
And touch and break
And damage, you
You, who can play
And be unpunished
Not again
No not for you
Manipulator
You should die
A pained release
But not for you
You face yourself
Though that won't do
You should be burned
You horrid you
No words suffice
Too low to dig
You broke the best
You glutton you
Don't try to speak
Your voice is useless
Nothing that you say
Will change it
The laws forgive you
Let you live, you
Laws can't save you
Soiled you, yet
Retribution has its hand
Its knife
Its gun
Its guillotine
It may take time
But you
You creature
You
You monster
You
You freak!
The world against you
You can't run twice
You stand today
A standing corpse
Don't prepare
You don't deserve it
Write no will
Your will is vile
See no family
You have none now
You....you
Fuck You!
Author notes
Written August 17th, 2005
A contest entry
- Suicide, Death, Hate, Cutting, Killing, by Emtjoe.
300 points, ended February 25, 2006, 17 entries
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OUCH.. This hurt my feelings.. i almost started crying it was soo mean... Anger Much?
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But you
You creature
You
You monster
You
You freak!
The repetition of the word "you" creatives such a hubbub of anger here, it helps you so much. Repetition is definitely your friend. Also, I will point out that your meter is very balanced to me, at least, and keeping each lie as a sentence fragment shows, to me, the type of anger, the unfocused, brutal, anger, teh chaotic-ness of it. -
Much of your poetry is so angry, brother. What is it that inspires an anger of this magnitude, because it is very difficult to write good dark or anger poetry unless you feel thusly. You have a good way of focusing on certain words, like 'you' in this poem. It's amazing how a variety of negative emotions are conveyed in one word at different times.
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Wow. I've never seen so much power put behind the word 'you' before! This was so great, I could really feel your anger and pain through the words. And your use of short lines really helped to confirm this. fantastic work, keep it up!
mel xx -
Great poem. Anger and bitterness is extremely clear. Great. Job. Your work is incredible.
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Becky
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Black coffee
Very good poem, very bitter and rightly so. -
Beautiful write, and yes, in a reply fro what you put in shameless, now I hate him too. Great job.
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Wow. Pedophile. Some men think they can take whatever they want and not be punished..Grr..
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awesome
I freaking love this
this is awesome
it totally reflects how I feel about someone
awesome job
Edited on Aug 17, 7:57 p.m. because ''.
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