sun rising again
all creation awakens
today is my gift
As the sun rises, my spirit soars
reaching towards my hope for today,
forgetting yesterday’s pain,
leaving behind my tears.
I begin again
in hope and love
for today
is His
gift
.
Author notes
This picture was taken yesterday from our balcony in Grand Caymans. God is so glorious and His creation is so beautiful. This is a combination of a haiku and nonet celebrating the gift of each day.
I also tried to make the form into a diamond representing how precious is each day.
fyi...A nonet has nine lines. The first line has nine syllables, the second line eight syllables, the third line
seven syllables, etc... until line nine that finishes with one syllable. It can be on any subject and
rhyming is optional.
line 1 - 9 syllables
line 2 - 8 syllables
line 3 - 7 syllables
line 4 - 6 syllables
line 5 - 5 syllables
line 6 - 4 syllables
line 7 - 3 syllables
line 8 - 2 syllables
line 9 - 1 syllable
Please do not use this picture without my permission.
Written August 17th, 2005
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A very inspirational duo...nicely done with a beautiful message.
Thank you for entering the contest.
Sam
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Such a nice and optimistic write. Well done Joanne.
Anna.
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Wow! This was beautiful and so was the picture! I like how you tried to shape it into a diamond to show how precious each day is. Each day will contribute to what happens next in life! I cannot believe that you actually took this picture! It is so beautiful! This piece was beautiful though! Haikus are hard to write...nonets are too! I am terrible at haikus and took a try at my first nonet today...not as good as I would have hoped! LOL! Everyone has room for improvement, but this piece was magnificent! I cannot find a thing to critique, so I will leave it at that!
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We didn't notice the "finger of God" clouding until I posted this on AP. It's pretty neat! God is so good! Love and hugs - joanne
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I'm no pro on forms and what not, but I do know I like what I see in this artistic piece. The picture (which is amazing-I'm truly impressed) looks like there is an arm extended down with a finger pointing on the left upper side. Reminded me of the hand of God. Beautiful, Joanne!
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lovely and extremely inspiring. i like how you didn't leave out that there is bad stuff in life, but you can overcome it.
wonderful write!
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I've never seen this combination before. Just lovely. A beautiful sunrise inspired a beautiful poem. Good luck! ~ Blessings ~ Sue
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Nice!
Hmmm, the haiku does not really have an 'Aha moment'. I'm not very happy with L3. It is more of a statement. Haiku involves juxtapostition. It is more of reporting than stating something. I would suggest you read up some excellent haiku and it's guidelines and then revise this entry.
In the nonet, L2 has 9 syllables and not 8. The rest of the format is right in the syllable count. The flow of the nonet is beautiful. I like the message and shape of this.
Goodluck in the contest!
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excellent
Beautiful Joanne!!!
This is a wonderful write and your forms are perfect and transition from one to other extremely well. Good luck in the contest. BRAVO!!!!!! -
You wrote this beautifuly Joanne, I hope it wins but even if it doesn't its wonderful and I loved it. I like nonets between those and rictameters they are my better forms I've done. Neat to see you trying this form out :-) Lovely photo also
I'm so glad you are enjoying yourself love ya, Me
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