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Days Of Old(Swap Quatrain)

In days of old brave knights did roam
Quite often very far from home
To free trapped damsels we are told
Brave knights did roam in days of old

On prancing steeds with lance in hand
In a manner extremely grand
Performed their miraculous deeds
With lance in hand on prancing steeds

Infidels chased, wild dragons slayed
No peril could make them afraid
Regardless of the odds they faced
Wild dragons slayed, Infidels chased

When they grew old no more did roam
With their damsels remained at home
Fond memories in minds they hold
No more did roam when they grew old.


Author notes

Xx.B i l l b a r d.Xx.
Written August 17th, 2005.

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  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 23

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    This however didn't keep my attention. It was good don't get me wrong just didn't keep my attention. So therefore sorry you can't go too round 3. Thanks for entering though.


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    September 30
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    I've read this before. Do you have any others?


  • LonelyAngel
    August 26

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    I could have not read this poem and just seen how many trophies it had won and commented on it. This is a great rhyming poem, and you used some great language used. My favourite lines were:

    ''Infidels chased, wild dragons slayed
    No peril could make them afraid''

    Overall, I would not change much, if anything and it is one of the better the ones in ths contest. This was a great poem anyway.

    Thanks for this entry,
    Good luck,
    Well done.

    xYx


  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    August 20
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    nice story told here, the imingery was good also...good luck
    Linda


  • princessarya
    August 16
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    it tells a story! i like!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    August 10

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    Excellent Quatrain with flawless flow to the rhyming verse.
    Very well deserving of its multiple awards---
    Well Done and best of luck in the contest!


  • Heva Feva
    July 3

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    "On prancing steeds with lance in hand
    In a manner extremely grand
    Performed their miraculous deeds
    With lance in hand on prancing steeds"

    These are my favourite lines! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
    -heva ♫

  • Mercury Rising
    June 22

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    First of all, congratulations on winning all those trophies. This is an excellent Swap Quatrain poem, and it was a real pleasure to read. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    May 24

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    Wow... this is very well-written! I love swap quatrains, but I'm no good at them
    Thankyou so much for entering this piece, and I wish you the best of luck!!

    Maria


  • Aedara-Wren silver member
    May 3

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    Its an interesting poem and I really like the use of the repeated lines to give it that firm structure. Overall the ideas are good and well presented but my rules did specifically ask for a definite story which this I'm afraid does not have.


  • TheSexyOne
    April 29
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    Really good write! thnx for entering


  • daviscth silver member
    April 26

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    I enjoyed this very much. Your poem has painted delightful imagery for me. Congratulations on all the cups and good luck in this contest too!


  • Denerica
    April 19

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    Nice to live in a fantasy and have an escape, especially in our writes, to imagine a time, excellent write. Blessings.


  • Fire-Fly
    April 13

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    Excellent poem, nicely rhymed but I felt the flow was a little awkward at times. A very effective piece though that I enjoyed reading.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.


  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    March 29
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    this piece of poetry is really amazing. I like the swap thing. i didnt know what it was at first. now i do. thanks for entering and good luck

  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    March 28
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    • if you would please space your name out in your AN like this : X x D r o w n . M e . D r y X x . Just out a space between each of your letters. Please. If you chose not to thats fine but i would like you you give me a reason


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    March 26

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    A perfect piece
    I love tales of old
    Thank you so much for sharing and for being part of this contest...bravo and kudos to you!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 24

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    Wonderful write!
    Flow/rhyme scheme
    were great and everything
    else fell into place nicely

    Thanks for entering & best of luck

  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    March 22

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    OMG thats alot of contests and tropies this one has won more than all of mine but thats deserved in this piece its reallygood


  • August Starlight silver member
    March 21

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    Congrats on all the trophies.
    This is entertaining, catchy, and tells a great story.
    Thanks for entering in good luck.


  • Luciferschild
    February 10

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    very catchy and very imaginative. i enjoyed each stanza and would like to know exactly how to write one of these if you ever have time?


  • JustFallingApart
    January 19
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    nice write, thank you for entering. best of luck in my contest hope all is well


  • etoile
    January 8

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    i'm not that fond of rhyme or form poetry, but this is very well written. i like it; it's a very nice story. great poem.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • Visit.Me.On.Mars
    January 8
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    WOW i dont know wat else to say but that i really liked it
    Janette


  • Haygood gold member
    December 26, 2008
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    I've heard of but not tried...

    I really like this form. You did an increditable job with it. Very, very nice.

  • piccola silver member
    December 26, 2008
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    nice job on the swap! I like rhyme a lot as most everyone who knows me, knows. So I did enjoy this a lot. The story as well as the style.

  • piccola silver member
    November 30, 2008

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    wow this has been in a lot of contests. I'm surprised it hasn't taken more gold. Oh well, more for me lol. Seriously this was a lot of fun to read.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 7, 2008
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    A very well worked swap quatrain, great fun to read as this form always is when well done.


  • leander Moderators member
    November 4, 2008

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    I'm not really familiar with form poetry, but the rhyming and the flow of this one definitely is perfect!

    Thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander


  • vampireblood
    November 2, 2008
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    This was good, I like it.
    Some parts in the piece I think you could have changed it up a bit instead of the repetition. But I still like the piece. It deserved all the trophies you have gotten. Overall I liked the rhythm of the poem as well. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.

    Vampy


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    November 2, 2008
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    Great write and well worth your trophies. Congratulations


  • fluffatron69
    November 2, 2008

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    It's an enjoyable poem, though pehaps the repetition of certain phrases isn't it's strength. However, I like the poem, and it made me smile as I can imagine reading something like this to children! Well done, and good luck in the contest!


  • LadyDeMarco
    October 30, 2008

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    it's cute. has a good flow to it, despite the rhyme (which means the rhyme is good). seems to be good for kids to read. good piece.


  • Sharcu silver member
    September 25, 2008

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    It seems like all my contests get you into it And I always love what you write! Very nice! Flowed well, rhymed well, and an all around great poem. Thanks for taking the time to enter

    --Tim


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    August 31, 2008

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    This is the first swap quatrain that I've ever read... I must say that I'm impressed. Good luck getting either silver or bronze *nudge* *nudge*

  • Atrus
    January 18, 2008
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    This poem has won a ridiculous amount of trophies :-) That's totally awesome, congrats


  • Melodies
    January 17, 2008

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    I think I might lie about my age and join you here because I would be in such good company. Your poem is splendid and made me smile and feel proud to know you.

  • Tumbleweed
    January 16, 2008

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    Awesome

    I love this! Love the form, love the subject matter, love the rhyme, love the vocabulary. I only looked out of curiosity, as I didn't expect there to be any entries in this particular age-group, and was pleasantly surprised. I hope somebody else will enter the contest, just so that nobody can say you won the trophy because you had no competition! I have no doubt that you will win, and deserve it, competition or no. You've got more trophies for this one poem than a lot of poets have for all of theirs, ha ha Here's wishing you luck and one more trophy for your collection.

  • Judith Chandler
    January 10, 2008

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    I have seen swap quatrains before but didn't know there was a name for them. I like the effect.

    This is like a fairytale, adventurous and manly. Congrats on the trophies.


  • ennovy silver member
    January 10, 2008

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    Brilliant Writer, Excellent Story

    Totally beautiful tale told in verse about the days of old; for which I am so fond. This is truly a golden read and I must attempt this style.....novy


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 9, 2008

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    This is really Good . Excellent rhyme, rhythm and use of the form. I have never tried this before but you made it look pretty easy to do. Congratulations on all of the previously written trophies they were well deserved.
    Thank you for taking
    the time to enter
    into my contest.
    I wish you the
    best of luck.

    RedwingSpirit


  • islekine gold member
    December 26, 2007
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    I have read this before...

    and it is still as good as I remember...Thanks for entering! Write on!
    *PEACE*


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    December 23, 2007

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    Wow all those Trophies! You certainly deserved every oneI loved the story. i read those negative comments and if it were me..I'd just ignore them all!This is what REAL poetry is and I applaud you!!!!!!!

    GBY
    SilverButterfly

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    December 21, 2007

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    I love swap quatrains because of the possibilites they allow for playing on the perception of the reader. Your write uses the repition to reinforce rather than confuse, which is good, because it is just way too easy to confuse me


    We have a whole new breed of Knights these days, but it seems that thought the battlefields and dragons have changed... they're still romaing and battling but always roam home to the damsel.

    s and best wishes... ~Genie~


  • Lone Defender
    November 30, 2007

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    Great stuff, mate. I can see it's already won a ton of trophies, so I don't suppose you need anymore comments to let you know it's a good one.

    But I'll comment anyway. Loved it.


  • KimmyKat
    November 30, 2007

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    YAY!

    Someone who knows (basically) how to use rhyme and meter properly!!!!!!! Good luck in this contest, I am going against you in it, lol.


  • Frodofan silver member
    November 30, 2007

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    Nice. A little choppy in the rhythm, but the story is good and I like how you conclude it. Thanks for entering.


  • Nam
    October 24, 2007
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    In your title, you should place a space between the "d" and the "(".

    Why is it when people write about the "Days of Old" they always write about such subjects? Especially since people like us wouldn't have been in that particular circle? Or perhaps it's me I'm thinking of? eh.

    Just a thought.

  • islekine gold member
    August 22, 2007

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    This is a wonderful piece.

    It deserves all of the trophies you have won. Because no one else had recieved trophies on their poetry and I liked them as well, they got top spots. This is a gold trophy for sure though. Thanks for entering
    *PEACE*


  • reckless abandon
    July 23, 2007

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    Interesting, this really captured my attention. I like the rhythm and rhyme put into this. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!


  • Floorboards
    May 29, 2007

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    good poem

    this is a good poem, with some strong images. thank you very much for entering my contest and good luck to you,
    floorboards.


  • Edna Sweetlove
    May 23, 2007
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    I found this quite amusing, specially the first couple of lines. I expected it to break into...

    In days of old
    When knights were bold
    And toilet paper hadn't been invented.....

    The rest of that poem is unsuitable for an allegedly family site.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    April 7, 2007
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    thank you very much for entering. whisper


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 31, 2007

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    Very well done with the meter. I can't write in such complex meters ... Well at least not in this stage of my poetic career, not that it's a career but anyway. Well done once again, beautiful words and nice to read aloud.


  • dp robertson
    March 23, 2007

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    This is not bad for what it is attempting to do, although what its attempting is somewhat limited. Taking the first line and chopping it in half in the last line and reversing its order runs the risk of making the poem sound as if it has been penned by Yoda. Where the poem falls down is the essence of this piece is almost a poetry cliché to a poetry rip off of so many poems of this genre or subject that have gone before. The whole poem comes across as a pastiche of medieval clobber that gets regurgitated ad infinitum every time the word “knight” comes up. I would urge you to be more original in your word choices.

    David


  • Melodies
    February 2, 2007
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    A poem with fine images...

    An adventure into medieval times!


  • Edgar
    January 4, 2007

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    nice flow

    MY GREAT APOLOGIES...my computer was under virus hostage and i am finally able to access these poems..

    good write i see that many others think so also
    -evan


  • jonny rockets
    December 29, 2006
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    A good poem, and I like the repitition in the first and last lines of each quatrain. But I really don't understand why you add punctuation at random places in the last two quatrains. Good luck.
    Avec Chance~ Jonny Rockets


  • Walking shadow
    November 23, 2006
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    Grand job top gun

    This poem brings me thoughts of ancient times. Of brave knights in battle. This one brings me great pleasure reading it. I loved the part about dragons. Another example of hard hittle poetry that gets my attention.
    Grand job poet.
    Good luck top gun!

  • Pome
    February 11, 2006
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    I really like the form you have used for this and the lazy hound poetry... you are very good at it and the subject matter is grand.


  • guardian angel
    September 29, 2005
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    really nicely written.....not something that i could write about and make as interesting. well done

  • oOo Nicole oOo
    August 20, 2005
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    This Poem Deserved The Trophy


  • Lysithea
    August 20, 2005
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    This was an excellent write! Amazing imagery and details! You definetly deserved a medal. Well done and keep up the writing!

    ~Nicole

  • Raye Soleanna
    August 19, 2005
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    Brilliant! I would suck at writing those...Certain bloody styles of poems are easier for me than others. Like Cinquains and freestyle and natural rhyming. This is a great little story of like, fairy tales. Simple, and I love it.


  • DylanThomas
    August 19, 2005
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    seems more like a song to me...a happy song of old quests..I love this...had to reread it several times...great talent you have..this, I believe could become an ancient song passed down from generations....very good..thanks for letting me read this...well written..thanks....great job!


  • BattleOfBlood
    August 19, 2005
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    This was an interesting form, and it came out well. Keep on writing.
    Blessed be,
    LeFay

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