S w l e
n f k
o a s
D i i f l n
r f n l
t g a i
g
Gently to the cold earth,
Guarding her from cold and harm; a
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Written for the contest 'Typist Originality' by Loveable Cherub
Did not win, and the host did not comment.
Written August 17th, 2005
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. The "falling" is not supposed to emmulate actual falling, but the falling of snowflakes, which I feel it does adequately. And, the snow does fall to the cold earth, but snow is also an insulator; it protects the bulbs and spring plants. It also cuts the cold wind, as anyone who lives in the Midwest can tell you. I understand where you think there is a contradiction, but it really is not. I do appreciate the input, though. Well wishes.
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Hmm, there is something wrong with the "falling" part of this. The shape is not right if you want to reflect the feeling of falling. I suggest you edit it for a greater effect. Also, the paragraph contradicts itself. You say the snowflakes fall to the "cold earth" and then you say "guarding her from cold..." which doesn't really make sence. Possibly edit that part too. I hope these comments are helpful and sufficient
Have a good and peaceful day.
Kitty -
Thank you. Your comments mean a lot to me. Thank you for taking the time to give one.
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What a great way to make a poem like this. For me its a it early to think about snow. But i like it very much. It shows the care of nature. The way you present this write is indeed very original and very good done.
Herman
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