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Come sail with me
Across crystal blue waters
Follow me into the unknown
Love and peace waiting
To be shown
For you, for me
Drifting away from clouds of gray
Gazing into your blue eyes of truth
I hear a silent whisper song
Our Saviour above the mountains of hope
He's been our shelter all along
For you, for me
This seems not the day
But yet the Lord created them all
So all my dreams still can be real
I just hope I neither stumble, nor fall
As I cry for mercy above
For you, for me
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Author notes
Thanks for reading our hearts! -Tim & Carrie 
Written August 17th, 2005
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wow.. I can see why this is popular. Its a great write and comes with the truth. Congrats...
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Great!
I love this, I love this, I love this, it rocks my socks...and the flow in this free verse flows quite wonderfully...I applaud you two...Pen on, pen more...Thanks...
-Me
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wow..that's spirtual..i love it!!! please enter my contest!! i think u'll do good in it!!! it's call Summa Theologica
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a collab with you just brings about such beauty in words.this is a very tender piece.it's like two hearts singing as one,for this is a very melodic piece.it is most comforting and the two of you would do good to collab again.
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Tim,
This had a relaxing feel to it and nice flow its dreamy perhaps and brings a comfort very nice. Sherry
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Perfect love poem. It was very hard to choose any part, it was very nice from the beginig to the end. Following verses are very special:
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Drifting away from clouds of gray
Gazing into your blue eyes of truth
I hear a silent whisper song
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Beautiful. I found this encouraging and uplifting. It flowed like a song. It gives the sense of peace one experiences standing by the deep blue ocean as waves splash onto the shore.
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Perfect!
This is a beautifully written piece, I think one of the reasons I like it so much is because it reaches out with your heart, relating to so many others...Keep up the great writes you two!
magicalprincess~
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Come sail with me
Across crystal blue waters
Follow me into the unknown
Love and peace waiting
To be shown
For you, for me
Okay....where do I get my ticket! This opening is awesome, as is the rest of this beautifully written peice. The first stanza, however, is the perfect "invitation" into the body of the poem. It's perfection. The whole thing flows so smoothly, making it such a pleasure to read. You two work very well together, this is simply superb! Loved it, my friends...Bravo! -
This is such a wonderful write the two of you have penned together. Thanks so much for sharing this write with me Timothy.
Not much can be said about this except that its prefect!!
Much love to you both,
Tammy
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Though our faiths walk different paths, I am glad to see yours has returned my friend. Stay sweet and kind, stay YOU.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
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wow nice write! fantastic imagery and cool water theme. this is a really deep poem and i already knew that you put everything you've got into all your poems. a nice change of poem for me so thanks
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The tributes in this poem and the after-comments from both writers confirm the strong bond felt by the writers. I envy you two cos my family have never been able to express such closeness, though they may well feel it.This was a breath of fresh air in a world of pollution. camus
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You've created a lovely watery scene, and speak of divine powers. Makes interesting reading. Thanks for sharing this.
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This is quite a sweet write. Sounds like a hymn or something with the repeating line, "for me, for you" Although I don't share your beliefs I think you created a nice tribute to your god.
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Great!
My fav lines, the whole thing was excellent though, but truly my fav lines are...
Drifting away from clouds of gray
Gazing into your blue eyes of truth
I hear a silent whisper song
Our Saviour above the mountains of hope
He's been our shelter all along
For you, for me
Amazing write you two, thanks for getting together on this one, reads great!
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Well Done!
So truthful, so loving, flowed so freely, and I adored the imagery! Thanks for a great read you two, pen on!
peaceinmind26
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Awesome...Honest Write...Bravo!
Hey there you two!
I like this, trying a lil free verse are we, well, I must say, I like what I see, from both you Dad, and Carrie! Hey, that rhymed, LOL! 
You know what I get from this piece, Pure, Honest Imagery! (For You, For Me) I love it! Thanks for sharing, and I hope to read more of you both, laters, and keep that pen a weaven! 
lil Tim
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Excellent, If I Do Say So Myself!
You are so welcome my sweet sis, and I as well want to thank you for what a awesome friend you've been, and all your rays of hope...wheather it be a rainbow after the rain, or the sun that shines through the gray clouds of our dreary days...Thanks for being you, and penning this piece with me... "For You, For Me" s
Much
to you and yours always!
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver~
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I really love this one. Its so sweet and heartfelt. I can hear seagulls and wind and water in the backround. And the flow of the words reminds my of the rolling of the ocean. My favorite lines were:
"Drifting away from clouds of gray
Gazing into your blue eyes of truth
I hear a silent whisper song"
Your poetry is so beautiful. Great write!
-Rothanna
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I love it when we collab. Whether it be a sad piece, a dark piece or in this case a spiritual piece. Some how we always seem to compliment each others thought process. Thanks so much for doing this with me sweet brother of mine.
Always
Carrie
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