When the darkness gains its hold
When the wind blows bitter cold
When the light seems far away
And you long to see the day
Keep the faith and keep your smile
I am with you all the while
There in stars that shine above
Twinkling in a dance of love
When life's struggles hold you down
When laughter turns into a frown
When your soul is tired and weak
Simple peace of mind you seek
As you face each painful trial
I am with you all the while
Whispering if you'll just hear
Calming all your doubt and fear.
When you feel alone and lost
Spirit weak and tempest tossed
Close your eyes and free your heart
I've been there right from the start
Standing near when you would sigh
Holding you when you would cry
Guarding you with strength and guile
I am with you all the while
A contest entry
- Have you ever been in Love by Endeavor.
900 points, ended February 10, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love's Many Faces by Silly Rabbit..
600 points, ended May 22, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - True Love by Samantha Marie.
450 points, ended October 5, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Secret Love by piccola.
650 points, ended October 22, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best of Gold. by morgana raven.
400 points, ended February 9, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Favorite Rhyme by piccola.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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this makes me happy and if it was really written for someone she's one lucky woman ... I've read some of the other comments and I think you should have it put to music.
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This sounds almost like a hymn. You could sing this in church. It's so filled with spirituality. I love it.
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At first I didn't like all the 'when' at the beginning of each lines to start, but then it kind of started to make a nice rhythm. I love this part 'When you feel alone and lost
Spirit weak and tempest tossed' the alliteration here was very nice and words chosen so well.
Thank you for entering.
Laura -
It is a song!!!
Please find someone to put music to this. It is a beautiful song. Excellent meter and rhyme. I really like this one. Great job.
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wow...this is so sweet...simple, sincere and most of all stunning! all the words touched my heart and after reading this...it took my breath away! good luck!
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I just sit here gazing at the background and re-reading the words. It makes me feel all warm and fuzzy as if there is someone there thinking of me, caring for me ... unseen arms wrapped around me. Amazing write ...
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this is a great write love,
thanks for entering and good luck -
I have read your verse
Thank you so much for submitting your words to my contest
I will comment in detail on my final selections
I wish you well in the contest
Thank you
Rick
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Beautiful!
This was beautifully written,
I enjoyed the read and hope to see more!
Goodluck
~Lisa~
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YOU are "The Man"
All your poems are simply great
All the writes upon your plate
It is a delight to feast
Where gourmet foods never cease -
Another great write! The message is comforting; the words are pacifying. Again, the rhyming is flawless. You're a smashing good poet, my dear chap. Don't stop writing! You'll deprive us of your gift!
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its beautiful, if only I had someone there for me!
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Ooohhhh, that's really beautiful! This is how every love should be
Lovely poem.
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it reminds me of a guardian angel, always there but not necessarily noticed, a beautiful piece
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awesome
wow a wonderful love poem .. great jpb ... i loved the flow and the wording. great write. -
excellent
Wow, this was a really great poem. I really enjoyed the rhyming pattern you used here. very clever. i wish i could write a love poem as wonderful as this. excellent job -
I really liked this poem. The rhyming did not seem forced at all (That always jumps out at me..) and I love the message, and the love in this poem. Keep writing.
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This is a great poem. It is well written and flows good. There is a sence of peacefulness when you read the poem.
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This is wonderful, it would make a wonderful blues song, gets right down there into the soul and takes hold of it...as the reader i see the sincerity in your words.
Well done.
Moon -
This is a beautiful love poem. there is such a tenderness and a sweet soft caring aura surrounding your words here. Very lovely. Thank you for the pleasant read and welcome to Allpoetry!!
♥ Kimberly -
Aaaw so sweet, love is great, keep up the awesome work
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