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Sneak Peak

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My own little Garden of Eden
full of ripe passion fruit
he's looking mighty tempting
standing in his birthday suit

Now what is a woman to do
should I look the other way
should I blush and turn red
or get on my knees and pray

Boy this is a big decision
I had better decide real fast
because this magic moment
is probably not gonna last

I think I will count to three
and turn around real quick
oh no now my stomach hurts
I think I'm gonna be sick

My heart is really pounding
here goes I got nothing to lose
ah!!he's not naked anymore
he has on his socks and shoes




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Written August 16th, 2005

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  • Autumn Whisper
    January 14, 2006
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    Wicked poem grandma, you have written a very good piece here, as always, of course, you are very talented and gifted, well done
    best wishes as always
    Moonstone Virgo
    (grandson)

  • Sandygram silver member
    September 24, 2005
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    WONDERFUL COMMENT

    I wrote seven hundred poem and of course you had to find this one. I was in one of my silly moods when I wrote this for a contest. Thank you for the nice comment (I think) Sandy

  • shubs
    September 24, 2005
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    I dont know what to comment on this one..a different take on the earliest known instincts to man..sneaking..eavesdropping comes a close second..tch tch...so bad so sad...-Shubs
    Edited on Sep 24, 8:26 because ''.

  • moonprincess
    August 17, 2005
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    Thanks for entering in my contest!!! lol this was very cute...the ending made me laugh lol great job with this!!!
    Good luck in the contest!
    Cassie
  • Linda Sue silver member
    August 17, 2005
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    4 Peeks! * * * *

    Hi Sis ~ I remember this one from last Spring. Very cute! Good luck in the contest. Linny

  • Arsenic-
    August 17, 2005
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    That was very cute... but I didn't get the line about turning around and being sick...didn't seem to fit the poem, or did I just miss something? Michael.

  • ICULookn
    August 17, 2005
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    HAHA....cute write, done with the humor. Thank you for featuring your piece for us to shared in your humor. Blessings

    Keep the pen sharp


    ICULookn
  • Munda
    August 17, 2005
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    It made me laugh alright! Love how you gave it a twist and the way you wrote this poem made it very easy to read and enjoy. Well done!

  • ceXee
    August 17, 2005
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    wow this is really neat, i love the pic too its so cute! good luck in the contest!
  • da little poet7
    August 17, 2005
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    this is really cute and funny. the pictures adds even more to it. it intrigues the reader. the rhyme isn't forced. you did a good job with that. good luck in the contest!

  • IamMEg
    August 17, 2005
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    Giood rhyme and rhythm; this work reads easily. it is funny; from the beginning the reader is drawn in to read it through.

  • Windworder gold member
    August 17, 2005
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    Hehehe, last time I ask you to dress the kid! Lots of humor in a concise yet warm format. Always a great way to start the day with a smile brought on by a friend.
  • camus gold member
    August 17, 2005
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    Amusing and interesting

    The contest asked for humorous poems and got one in this short piece. It was interesting to note the humour based on the alleged expectations of society when in direct opposition to the basic instincts common to us all (yes, even women). On a more serious note, the writer effectively conveyed the conflict between instinct("magic moment") and culture(her fear of being thought unladylike). camus
  • buffytheparrotslaye
    August 17, 2005
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    Hilarious!

    Darn now just you tear those shoes right of that tempting little Devil and invite us all in to your Garden of Eden.thouhg men in the raw are seldom pleasing!Hilarious and subtle too!Oh please make sure that when you remove the shoes the socks go too.Nothing worse than a man in just his socks!Want to applaud but as am pointless yet again applaud from heart and soul.Love your word play!

  • Malabu
    August 17, 2005
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    reminds me of my laying on the beach looking at this beautiful women in a bikini....I thought to myself....awwwwe she is so scrumptous I wish to have her at my delight.....seeing her lying there tanning with a glow of her tanned soft skin of silk..next to her head sat a pair of combat boots......beautiful thoughts run rampant in my mind...thinking to myself.....ahhhhh naked would I love to see her....just wearing her combat boots.....
    Malabu
    Edited on Aug 17, 7:06 because ''.

  • Sandygram silver member
    August 17, 2005
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    WONDERFUL COMMENT

    Ah Thank you Don. It is always a pleasure to read your comments. I hope all is well with you. Take care and God Bless you. Sandy

  • Donjo1030
    August 17, 2005
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    excellent

    Nice write Sandy!!!
    I really like how you ended this. Another wonderful write from your pen that flowed extremely well. Good luck in the contest. BRAVO!!!

  • Sandygram silver member
    August 16, 2005
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    WONDERFUL POEM

    Ah thank you Melanie. It is always a pleasure to hear from you. I hope all is well with you and your family. I shall be praying for you all. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Take care and God Bless you,Sandy
    ;f

  • luckynsincere gold member
    August 16, 2005
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    Very cute.. certainly made me giggle!!! Sandy this is a great way to start the evening... with a good laugh!! Best of luck in the contest!!
    Mel
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