I send you my deepest kiss
the kind that brands the soul.
All my love I send in this,
for your love makes me whole.
Oh, when you say the magic phrase
I'm drenched in sweet elation,
I love you in so many ways
but each have the same sensation.
Every thought passing through my mind
Sooner or later ends with you
Like all rivers and streams that find
the ocean so serene and blue
Life, a walk on the edge of knife
so slippery and wet with rain
But you're the sunshine of my life
that drives away clouds of pain
Thousands of miles yawn between us
keeping us so far apart
Despite a constant hurdle thus
there's a rhythm of heart to heart
As we sing this song tonight
your sweet kiss lights up my lips
With the passionate fire alight
all darkness, on the double slips
Author notes
Written August 16th, 2005
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Touching....love the word braided and how it weaves two together tightly. Soooo nice to read.
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Oft time poets force rhymes intentionally. I do. There have been countelss lyrical writers that rearranged syntax to create rhyme. It's not against the law and worked very well for me with this lovely poem.
There is a soothing feeling to these words. Trust ensues. One of those writs that makes you feel warm and snug. Beautiful and romantic.
Much Love,
Renee
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This is a masterpiece... beautifully written... Wonderful poem. I really loved this peice. It was something that flowed really well and seemed perfect in every way. I liked the way that every line meant something deep and was individual. Truely beautiful... its nice to see you're writing again... keep it up...
mina -
This is really a beautiful write. You expressed your emotions perfectly and the love you obviously feel for this person. Great work!
Megan -
Excellent
I love this poetic duet and how both your names show up in collaboration. This is a beautiful poetic kiss that is so powerful even those who pass by and see even feel it's tingle.
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omg this is good. i especially love the line about being the sunshine driveing away clouds of pain, excellent work, keep it up!
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Miles yawn is quite a personification. never heard of that before. Novel idea. Creative and interesting poem.
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this was great!! i loved it! please, keep up the great writing!
~Kariime~ -
great
I love it. there are just certain poems that hit the spot, and this is one of them. I truly like it -
oh and you could possibly title it Kiss.. just a suggestion
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i loved the first stanza, a kiss can mean so much and be so tender, but the second stanza last line I have to disagree on a personal level. Love causes so many different sensations and emotions.. just my opinion totally.. and the last line doesn't fit it seems comical in a poem that is seriously emotional.. but i loved so much about this the flow and the rhym seemed so natural sorry to disagree bluepoetess but i must. excellent work and i love the background
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i love this. please keep up the good work
~ashley~ -
a bit long...some stanzas seemed forced..for the sake of rhyme...i dont know..all in all, a good job with writing this. pretty page. enjoyed.
Blu -
This is really beautiful and lovely. Nothing better than a nice kiss and love. You have great description in this and the imagery very vivid and clear. You have written this well and with great love from your heart. Very well done and so very lovely. Thanks for sharing it.
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This is lovely, good work you two. The feeling is so close, and yet "thousands of miles yawn" - the frustration is palpable. It sounds like a telephone call.
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this iz a sweet poem i like it and the back ground makes it look cool... keep it up
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