Standing under the waterfall of my thoughts and wishes
Reaching out so to touch the passing dreams
Letting the rush of the cold icy heartaches flush over me
It almost steals my breath away
Stepping into this whirlwind of confusion
Onto this catastrophe of bad decisions
Letting life's opportunities flow by
It all lands in the river below
Piling all the chaos together
Its drifting there for me to view
All the thousands of memories are accompanied by my most recent tears
Slowly all of this is joined by a nearby stream
Trickling over the rocks and pushing aside the dead leaves
Its like looking at all my past crushed dreams
Trying to push them aside and move on to bigger things
But more and more keep running head on into me
Maybe i should dive
Dive straight down to the bottom of my despair
Holding my breath to view my surroundings
I wonder how long i could make it down there
Looking and recollecting on my past
Then i see it the one memory that has captured my dreams
Him
Its just his face floating right there beside me
I thought i had forgotten i thought he was gone
But he isn't and i haven't so maybe ill stay longer
Where everything is quiet
And his face lingers behind
Until i can no longer see
Until i can no longer breathe
And everything fades away
Goodbye..................................................Regret
Author notes
i sat down at the computer and started typing and this is what i ended up with...what do you think?
Written August 15th, 2005
What did you think
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You have a great mind for writing! A way with words, is what my mother would say! This piece was so beautifully! Well, you might see his face again, but if he deceives you again, then your mended heart will shatter again! I wish you the best and hope that your heart stays in one big piece! Keep up the good work! I loved this piece!
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yes unfourtuanatly it is who you are thinking of! im in florida right now vivisting with my aunt and we went to grorgia today to do some site seeing and swimming and just being there made me think a lot!! so i dunno. but thankx for the comment glad you liked it! it means a lot coming for you!!!thankx again!
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this was me at one time it is beautiful. my emotions in your words. the greatest thing about reading this is knowing that i have risen above these feelings above my past on to better things. thanks for writing this.
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i like that poem a lot it was really good thanx for sharin and keep up the good work
great write
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Awesome
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wow.. hunny pie htis is GREAT!.. i love it... whos face did you see?... i think i might have an idea...lol
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thank you so much babe!! im glad you liked it!! and you are rght i am better of without him. i still miss him though!
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WOAH BUDDY! this is the best poem i have read in a while babes and i think that you are such a wonderful writer! i think i know whos face it is and if i were in your situation i would get kinda freaked out to have his face next to mine! lol JK i know that you really liked him and he is a cool guy but you can never judge a book by its cover....im always here for you!! xxoxxoxx
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thankx!!! and yes i do believe a correction is needed there!! lol thankx!! im glad you liked it! i thought since you write such great poems and supply me with so much beautiful poems i thought i could do the same for you!lol glad you liked it!
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Outstanding!
Oh my gosh! This held me captive until the last word! Casey, this was incredible, beautifully written. The flow of this poem was magnificent! I felt every word, and could visualize it as it was happening.
Great job, sweetie!
Oh, almost forgot...
this line:
"I wonder how ling i would make it all the way down there",
I feel a correction is needed here.
Prince
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This is a beautifuly sad yet brilliantly written work full of powerful emotions and captivating images a work of art that deserves more alpauds and coments awsome work your talent truely shines through with a heart warming affect thank you for letting me read your work..
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thankx a bunch!!! i will defenetly enter your contest!!
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a million hugs!! thankx!!!
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i like it a lot. it is very good
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Wow this is an awsome write. You have alot of imagery here. So much pictures fly through my head when i was reading it. I only have one piece of advice.
Shouldn't...
"Until I no linger see..."
be
"Unitl I can no longer see..."?
Just thought i would let you know. Well over all it was a great write lots of imagery and it is powerful. You have talent. Keep it up and I would like to challenge you. Enter my contest and try something out of normal for you. Well good luck. I wish you all the love in the world. Love lots,
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:~Ally~ :~
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lol...thats ok!!! i didnt even notice it!
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wow! that was fast! i just put the poem up!lol thankx a whole bunches!!! well im off to comment on your poems!!lol
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Lmao that wasent suppose to be a wink
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I think it's awesome, you have a lot of talent here, keep up the amazing job.
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