I run on the same old Mobius strip
looking for the end of road to be unfold,
changing my direction, its obvious a clip,
I am still here and just I am getting old.
Up side or down, to the skies or to ground,
my everything always looks to be the same:
nothing is new; around, around, around…
no life, no love, no warmth, no flame.
I float with my head above the cloud
my wishes are always simple and green
without a chance to land to the ground
to be free and to find my last, last dream.
~*~
Author notes
My comment:
The Chosen One
Poison
Can you see me now?
Explanation:
A mathematician confided
That a Möbius band is one-sided,
And you'll get quite a laugh,
If you cut one in half,
For it stays in one piece when divided.
More about Mobius strip
scidiv.bcc.ctc.edu/Math/Mobius.html
Written August 15th, 2005
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Thank you my dear Lady for comment and applause. Life is like a picture makes of puzzles. Sometime we choose wrong pieces and everythings went up side down.
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this is a very intersting piece it really makes one think. I trully enjoyed it. Keep it dear. SMoosh to you
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Thank you Katerina for your kind comment.
I am always trying to be original and different.
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I love the mobius strip example. Great job, cause this is really interesting as a poem. You have my admiration for tackling such a hard (to me) topic.
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I understand.
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I am from Croatia... lol. Well, this is personal. Just try ro run in the circle with no goal. You will never know where is the end.
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Well.. how very funny of you. I can see you now.. not like I was being blind before or anything. The explanation was not really an explanation. It was a riddle. I do not understand it as I have not even heard of a mobius strip. When you go to a thick school.. they tend not to bother with things like that. Or maybe they did and I wasn't listening.. who knows? It doesn't explain it because you have this is the catagory, 'personal' and I'm sure a modius strip cannot be that personal.. so why is it you have chosen to write about this.. thing?? But yeah, it was a good poem. I liked the rhyme scheme.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
skitza
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'Poison
A mathematician confided
That a Möbius band is one-sided,
And you'll get quite a laugh,
If you cut one in half,
For it stays in one piece when divided.
Inspiration*
Change...
Death by wordedtears'
Excuse me for being completely fucking baffled but what the fuck are you on about? What the HELL is a mobius strip? And what's the last bit about.. I'm guessing you commented on 'Poison'.. am I right? Follow all the rules.
skitza
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hi there! i know i commented already but i thought you'd like to know that your brilliant poem has made it to the finals in my contest. i love it. i love love love love LOVE it.... and it truly pains me to say this.. but because of that last stanza i'm afraid i cant give you first place.. im considering placing you second or maybe third, but nothing is guaranteed... ahh that hurt me more than it hurts you im sure, lol... because i truly love this poem, as you can see by my painfully long and obnoxious comments... heehee anyway i couldnt let it go without giving you an applause, the only i've given in a while seeing as i'm low on points... but i give it to you because you deserve it. and thus i applaud you.
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Thanks Odio. I am sorry, but sometimes I can't make any change. I am still only a poet...
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i reeeeeeeeeeeeally like this poem... just not the last stanza heehee sorry bout that, but other than that this is a WONDERFUL poem.
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Thank you. Searching coud be very tough job. Sometimes in vain. Thank you for very nice comment and applause.
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moebius rings - something between mathematical and mythical with a dash of philosophy thrown in. excellent metaphor to highlight an endless search, and in your case the search of that eluding last dream. very nice, soft and dreamy expression you portray in this poem.
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A great poem with a good senitment running through it, good title and well worded.
Very enjoyable.
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I really like the limmerick you put in your author's comments to highlight the poem above. Praytell, did you write the limmerick as well? Please feel free to read any/all of the poetry I've posted on this site, as I will certainly return the favor.-Curtis Meyer
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An inspiration to learn to begin anew, from the half to the whole. That is what this made me think... I like this alot. Thought provoking; abstract. The choice of flow really catured me to read deep. Great write! Very different - in a wonderful way! Good luck in the contest and thanks so much for entering!
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Thank you my dear mina. I am glad that you know who is Mobius and how this strip looks like. Yes, line could be there, but it is very hard to draw it on my own. Thank you for youg good wishes.
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Life can be like August Ferdinand's Möbius strip... but if you draw a line all around Mobius strip, it never crosses the edges... it stays in the smooth parts of it..
joke a side, its very sad... I'm sorry you felt this way when you wrote this poem... this is very thought provoking... Good luck in the contest...
mina
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Thank you born...
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Thank you. Yes, sometimes I feel like a Mobius strip runner...Thank you for your kind comment.
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