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For The Both Of You (sonnet)



Distance betrays the sentiment inside
Loneliness just becomes another trial
It's just so hard to take these steps in stride
The phone a respite for a little while

The unfair path that this life has granted
The separating ocean lies between
This flowering seed that has been planted
The only vision that brings the serene

Hold onto hope for it will not be long
The ties that bind will bring you together
Bring close the love that is so very strong
Faith shall keep it near to you forever

Nature proven wrong when lightning struck twice
You both shall find your blissful paradise



Author notes

Originally written for MariGoes and Yemassee, but I find that it applies to so many others as well....
May the obstacles between you crumble before the power inside you all...

Written August 15th, 2005

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  • gaze
    October 28, 2005
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    Still smile as I read this poem


  • leander Moderators member
    August 26, 2005
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    It's never easy to obtain your goal, as you have to conquer lots of difficulties in your life...something you captured very well in this sonnet... and then the twist that brings hope along... wonderfully written

    Thanks for taking the time to enter

    Leander


  • MargaretG
    August 25, 2005
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    The way is strewn with difficulties, and you enumerate them in your first two quatrains, with just the little hope of a seed. What a turn you make in the third quatrain! Faith, hope and love are the powers of the universe which build everything which is built. I love the benediction in the couplet, may it be so. Thanks for writing, this is lovely.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    August 18, 2005
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    Thank you! That is exactly the way I feel now. After the first days of disappointement and sadness, I did realize that Mayne and I will have all the things we dream of,a nd we are both commited to wait for that day to come.
    I loved this sonnet and thank you so very much for writting it lifting up my spirit

    Loves,
    Mari

  • Piglette
    August 15, 2005
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    Been there, done that, bought the t-shirt. Long-distance relationship...well...big sigh... Anyway, lovely sonnets! I love your sonnets!


  • iamfromabove
    August 15, 2005
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    A beautiful tribute for both of them EC.

  • Yemassee gold member
    August 15, 2005
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    Are you mad? I'm not sharing this fantastic poem with anyone! lol. Yeah, you experessed quite accurately the anguish involved with distance...but we're becoming pros at it.

    Lets hope this lightning strike has better results than my last one.


  • p b without the j
    August 15, 2005
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    A big, huge and a smooch . You make me smile.


  • fae
    August 15, 2005
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    And oh a major AND YES, it certainly does. Oh yes


  • fae
    August 15, 2005
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    A beautiful tribute poem of hope, and necessary patience. Ever so well written and expressed

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