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When the Bubble Bursts - Sonnet #I

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                    Sonnet I

 

I doubt if one's acquaintance can approve,

the whereabouts of suffering one must move

before unnecessary doubt be preconceived

impatient though some countenance believed.

Deficiency may lack in some oppressed-

extravagant exploit to justice best

the positive between the zealous strand,

of circumstance expecting the unplanned.

A compromise to chuckle through the maze,

of angers that emotion wise, displays,

complexion, the security - half wise,

the zealous state to plural enterprise.

How one can feel for someone having doubt,

that something quite not right can show without.

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  • BleedingDeep
    February 1, 2008
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    i realy do like this piece! It's great....very nature like...


  • neverontime
    November 22, 2006
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    This is an interesting and thought provoking piece. I really enjoyed reading it. It makes me think of life and death in tune with nature, and all as a magnificent carefully orchestrated plan. Love this!


  • neverontime
    November 22, 2006
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    This is an interesting and thought provoking piece. I really enjoyed reading it. It makes me think of life and death in tune with nature, and all as a magnificent carefully orchestrated plan. Love this!

  • dream catcher
    July 19, 2005
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    Simply amazing, another incredibly fantastic write that i would never in a million years be able to fully appreciate because my brain is simply not smart enough to understand all of your wide (and awesome) vocabulary. Supoib write


  • stormigrl
    July 6, 2005
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    Beyond Greatness!

    Did you steal this from Shakespeare? or the Book according to Titus? O wait you are Titus. LOL. Love Sonnets of Titus. How poetic and heart felt warm with the natures pastures pleasing to your own eyes to your soul. How enchantingly warm can this ever be? Not as breathless as this piece has become!!!
    My wonderful friend Titus!!

    Marianne


  • Cream22
    June 24, 2005
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    great

    um I like it

  • Tumbleweed
    May 24, 2005
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    This is nice, beautiful use of the language. You don't see too many epics nowadays. Great job and thanks for entering.

  • wbluerose02
    January 29, 2005
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    Great Job

    Another one of your famous writes,good job in wording this wonderful piece. Maybe some day I will be as talent as you my friend,and write famous poetry,Thank you for sharing this with my family and I.

  • qtpa2t1224
    January 29, 2005
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    Gorgeous!

    beautiful! thanks so much for commenting on my poem. i really, really appreciate it! she was my best friend and i really miss you. thank you very much for your support. you're a great poet and i hope you never give up your speactacular talent! keep me reading! thx again!
    ciao!
    love/qtpa2t

  • Mia Donna
    January 22, 2005
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    You know, this was beautiful. Great connections here. Thanks a bunch for entering; this was an enjoyable read.

  • SaPpHiReSoDiUm
    January 17, 2005
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    This poem is really beautiful. Very druidic. I don't know if it's actually a sonnet, though. I agree with ravens..you need that sharp change at the end. It's what makes it a sonnet. A really pretty poem though.

  • Indigospirit
    January 17, 2005
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    Very good imagery

    Very good imagery, love the comparison of nature to an orchestra. Very good. Good luck.

  • ecrivain01 gold member
    December 13, 2004
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    Where's the volta? Otherwise, this is okay, but without the volta it's not a sonnet, it's a lyrical poem. I like the imagery in this, by the way.


  • anansi
    December 6, 2004
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    I think with enough sense in a person, they could be as brilliant in writing sonnets as all those ancient scholars.

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