A Better Mousetrap
Yes,
My life could
DEFINE folly
It’s penultimacy
Unworthy of a five
Second Leno anecdote
If a life is to be
Squandered
At least it could be done
Boldy
Garishly
A loud belch of
Resolute chaos
Rather than
The timid eek
Following the snap
Of the sentence
Received by all those
Of us caught
Ignominiously
In that same
Mousetrap
Author notes
Written August 14th, 2005
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Have you been in my head?!
You've created quiet the masterpice here. This one grabs you and reels you in with ease, then takes you on the trip of life. A most excellent piece! Blessinga and many hugs, Gypsy
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Hmmm...very interesting read in this. Hope by now, you do not feel quite so down. Have missed you much. Your pieces so hit home to the heart and matter of things within me in ever so many ways. Peace and love always,
rose
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As my motto is don't just exist...LIVE, this write appealed to the inner me. I must thank leo for recomending you, your poetry obviously deserves a deeper look!
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This was great I really liked it. It had a very creative and interesting perspective to it. Awesome job. WRITE ON! ~Lacey~
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You've penned the truth me brother. Unfortunately life is full of traps and pitfalls. I think your words say it all.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
Wow! Truly a unique representation - second to none!
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I thought that this was an amazing write, I do have to admit I had to read it twice to get the full meaning of the write but that's probably just because I'm a little slow at times lol. It's hard when you cannot find anyone that you can trust, you don't know how to move on and everything just builds up inside of you causing stress and anger until you release it on someone you wish you haddn't. Your words were perfectly placed and told such an amazing write. I loved this immensely and I hope to read more from you soon. Keep writing hun, -Heather
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Excellent!
Hard to find anyone you can put your trust in thses days my friend, and it seems life is full of mousetraps...sadly enough, for we all live in the same world, and watch it through the eyes of wanting love, but some unwillingly watch it pass by, and care not as you and I...Love this piece you've penned, once again my friend, you call it as you see it! Great job!
Your Bro, Timbo~
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Hi Dan this is an unusual one for you, but no doubt there's a double meaning tucked away in there. I'm glad you're back my Friend and I enjoyed reading this as much as I do your other poems.
Hugs Joan 
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