The sky at night:
punctured by countless pinheads.
Each one dwarves the earth.
This is why I like my cosy bed.
Lying there; my room seems the universe
and I, its centre, am almost as big.
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Written August 13th, 2005
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WOW WOW!!!!! A short write, but you have captured a powerful visual picture.... Deep write, visual magic, excellent write
Thank you for sharing
Tracey -
thought-provoking
Okay, this was a very very thought-provoking write. I must think on it. I suppose there is a thread of thought that goes like the philosophy that you seem to imply in this poem. ie. the philosophy that man is the centre of his world. In a way he is, because the only things that exist are the things that he realises as real in his world adn in that way, man is also the creator in his world because of somethign similar to reader response thoery which implies that the reader, lsitener, viewer creates meaning from words or objects.
As a Christian tho, I believe that God is the supreme creator and the true centre of the universe.
I liked your poem. It was well-written and quite thought-provoking.
gypsybelle.
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Universal Starriness!
This is just the way I feel about a room that I have in my house.It is made of glass and when I cant sleep lie in there and feel the whole Universe is at my feet! -
As a teen I felt this way about my roo, and thinking about it now, I have a similar feeling. Nice original piece well written - enjoyed it.
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Your poem is so true! My room has to be just like that! I love this poem. It was great reading it. I enjoyed it. Great imagery. Great flow. You did a nice job writing this. Keep writing and thanks for sharing this- you did an awesome job! Best wishes!
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i like this your room the only place you can control what goes in and out who bothers you or not. yeah i see that as a great universe. great write.
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Wow... Its like I could feel the words and imagine this poem AWESEOME.
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indeed
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